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November 12, 2017 at 4:24 pm #52950Anonymous
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Hey everyone. So I think that a lot of people are currently busy with NaNoWriMo, so this can wait. It’s not urgent at all. I do need help with a short story critique. This story is 2,261 words long, and is a retelling of Hansel and Gretel. If you do have time to look it over, then please let me know. I’ll send a separate update-message to whoever wants to help me. Thanks guys!
@daughteroftheking, @ingridrd, @dragon-snapper, @salome01w4g, @cloudy, @ethryndal, @northerner(I don’t know who is doing NaNoWriMo, so if I tagged you and you are, don’t worry about this unless you have the time)
November 12, 2017 at 4:51 pm #52962@shannon I would definitely be interested! Not sure when you need it done by, but I would love to. 🙂
A dreamer who believes in the impossible...and dragons. (INFJ-T)
November 12, 2017 at 5:02 pm #52965Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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November 12, 2017 at 7:22 pm #52967@shannon I know you didn’t tag me but I could help you if you like
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Also, Daeus has 22 turtles in his signature.November 12, 2017 at 7:28 pm #52968Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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@sam-kowal, consider yourself tagged! Go ahead and use the link up in the message to Ingrid. Thanks for your help!
November 12, 2017 at 7:53 pm #52970@shannon I’ll have it done as soon as life permits! 🙂
A dreamer who believes in the impossible...and dragons. (INFJ-T)
November 12, 2017 at 7:56 pm #52971@shannon I got it!
And I really like it! So nice to have a good witch every once in awhile
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Also, Daeus has 22 turtles in his signature.November 12, 2017 at 8:00 pm #52972Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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@ingridrd Sounds good. Just have it done sometime in the next century and I’ll be happy 😜.
@sam-kowal Fantasy isn’t really usually in my line, so this was a step out of the ordinary for me. I probably wouldn’t have known how to write a bad witch anyway 😉.November 12, 2017 at 8:08 pm #52974@shannon
Wow! So you rarely even write fantasy? I wouldn’t have guessed that.
Well, just make her kidnap Hazel. And use her as a tool to access the wealth. And other unpleasant things like that
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Also, Daeus has 22 turtles in his signature.November 12, 2017 at 8:58 pm #52976Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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@sam-kowal Actually, I read way more than I write, so I really don’t write that often. But when I do, it’s usually something like historical fiction.
November 13, 2017 at 12:54 pm #52990@shannon I’d love to help! *excitedly goes off to read*
INFJ ~ 4w5
aldarley.wordpress.comNovember 13, 2017 at 1:15 pm #52991Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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@epicaddie2 Thank you, thank you, thank you!
November 13, 2017 at 1:27 pm #52992@shannon ‘Course! It was really good! I really like all the changes you made to it. It made it really unique, but not so unique that I couldn’t tell which fairytale it’s based off of.
INFJ ~ 4w5
aldarley.wordpress.comNovember 13, 2017 at 1:29 pm #52993I kinda want to write a fairytale retelling now 😉 But I have too much school. *sigh* At least I have motivation to finish school now!
INFJ ~ 4w5
aldarley.wordpress.comNovember 13, 2017 at 1:29 pm #52994Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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@epicaddie2 Thanks! It was really fun to write, especially because I love Hazel.
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