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Hello everyone! I had an idea for a different project than intrigued me enough that I felt the need write it down. This doesn’t happen very often to me. In fact, I think the series I am currently writing, The Narrow Path Trilogy, it the only other idea I have had. So I had to put working on TNPT Book II aside this week and jot down this scene and world building ideas I had so that if I ever do want to take this further, I’ll remember where I was going. (Sorry to those who are currently reading TNPT Book II.)
I’m curious what other people think of this idea and if they think this is something that should be further developed. This document contains a scene showcasing the protagonist an his faithful companion. Please note, this is not supposed to be a likeable character. I’m trying to go for interesting character instead, so he’s going to have some questionable ideas in his head. The scene is just over nine pages long. If it intrigues you, there are some world building notes below.
If you don’t want to read it or are too busy, don’t worry about it.
(Note: This is a darker than what I usually write.)
Because of weird website glitches, I will post the links bellow.
@ellette-giselle, @keilah-h, @whalekeeper, @stephie, @theducktator, @highscribeofaetherium, @hybridlore, @rae, @raxforge, and anyone else who happens to stop by.Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Google docs link:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zyuStAitYHhUzO2MumqPxK1MIYbpeJAz0gFjRHNM7i0/edit?usp=sharing
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Proton docs link:
https://drive.proton.me/urls/S97F6F45SG#yYjNNPFyBy0Z
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
I thought it was interesting! The beginning was slightly confusing, because I couldn’t figure out how Cedrick was narrating. But it has a very intriguing premise!
Isaiah seems… questionable, like you said. I would like to see Hana meet him.
If you add to it, please tag me!
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
This is very interesting. I hope you continue with it! You can tag me if you do!
(also, I love Scythe!)
Exit pursued by bear
@hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium
All right! Thank you both! I’m happy to hear you found it interested. It will probably be a while until I return to this, but if I ever do I will let you know.
The beginning was slightly confusing, because I couldn’t figure out how Cedrick was narrating.
Yeah, making that work is going to be a bit of a challenge. I know I should introduce Isaiah first to avoid confusion on the protagonist, so I’m going to have to find a more natural transition to the reveal that his pet is telling everything. The idea of a dragon narrating the story has been one I have had for a while.
(also, I love Scythe!)
I liked it more until my one friend got way too good at it. But I still love the artwork and world it takes place on.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
I enjoyed that quite a bit. Tag me if you post more!
?For our Blessed Lady's sake, bring us in good ale!?
Whoa.
That was….interesting.
Isaiah really does have a wonky moral code, ngl.
Nobody berate me for this cause it’s purely theoretical, but I had to kill a guy, and he had food, and I was hungry, I’d be taking the food. Not out of greed or wishing to thieve, but still. I see he said he didn’t want to steal and murder, but I’d say he was definitely murdering there lol.
I like how the perspective is that of the not-dog, whatever he is. Him getting distracted by the food was hilarious.
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
*enraged because I was never tagged by KP*
I will look at this as soon as I can. aka tomorrow.
Maybe.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
Hey! Scythe! My dad and brothers LOVE that game. Funny thing is, I can’t stand it, but I’m the one that got them into it by buying it for them. ? Weirdly enough, I was picturing this kingdom like the scythe art, so that’s super funny.
i really, really like this!!! The narrative and flow and style is 100% a step above TNPT. But that could be the whole problem that I’m facing of trying to combine new knowledge with an old story. Surprisingly, I didn’t even have an edits! I am 100% intrigued and would totally check this out, or maybe even by it if the author was a trusted Christian.
If you carry forward with this, (which you should!) tag me because I 100% want to read it.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
Isaiah really does have a wonky moral code, ngl.
I know. But that’s what makes him interesting and why I had to write this down.
I like how the perspective is that of the not-dog, whatever he is. Him getting distracted by the food was hilarious.
Did you see that note in the appendix explaining what he is?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Did you see that note in the appendix explaining what he is?
I didn’t! Where’s the appendix?
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
Hey! Scythe! My dad and brothers LOVE that game. Funny thing is, I can’t stand it, but I’m the one that got them into it by buying it for them. ? Weirdly enough, I was picturing this kingdom like the scythe art, so that’s super funny.
It is a neat world, and the artwork is very good (though I wouldn’t recommend looking the artist up because he has some bad stuff as well). Funny how even though I didn’t find a way to tell you much about the world your mind went there.
i really, really like this!!!
Okay! Most people seem to be reacting positively to this, so I will definitely conciser coming back.
The narrative and flow and style is 100% a step above TNPT. But that could be the whole problem that I’m facing of trying to combine new knowledge with an old story.
Interesting. Did you find it confusing at all when it switched to reveal that Cedrick was narrating everything?
Surprisingly, I didn’t even have an edits!
Because I actually used spellcheck this time.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
I didn’t! Where’s the appendix?
Right after the story in the same document
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
@linus-smallprint ok! I’ll go read it!
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
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