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June 7, 2016 at 6:33 pm #13842
There’s a lot of truth to a quote I once saw, at least in my own life: One either gets a title right the first time, or they spend weeks or months agonizing over it. Or, in my case, years.
So, there’s this book I’m working on. Originally it was called Legend of the Shield, then The Shield and Spear. It’s most recent title is The Final Clash. I’m trying to find a better name and nothing is snapping, so I am hoping I’ll get some ideas here. *crosses fingers*
The story is a fantasy where the MC finds a legendary shield and has to defeat an enemy trying to destroy his nation. In the process, he learns to trust in the Prince and give everything over to him. Wow, I managed the whole book in two sentences!
Anyhow, I’d kind of like to have the word clash or clashing in the title, and possibly the word shield or legend. But it’s not completely necessary. Some ideas I’ve had include:
The Clashing
The Clash
Kingdoms’ Clash
Clashing Shield.Do you like any of these titles? Do you have any ideas of titles which could work?
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
June 7, 2016 at 7:00 pm #13843I thought that The Final Clash was good title. I like it better than any of the one you have suggested there.
June 7, 2016 at 7:32 pm #13844Legendary Shield
A Shield And The Nationπ’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’
June 7, 2016 at 7:33 pm #13845I like the Final Clash, and honestly, I like “Legend of the Shield.” I know you must have had reasons for renaming the book, but those are the ones I like. Sorry, I’m probably not being helpful. :/ Let me see if I can think of any other titles…
What about “Legend of the Clashing Shield?” Or maybe “The Clash of Kingdoms?” I don’t know…June 7, 2016 at 7:41 pm #13846Hoo boy. Let’s see @Hope.
*Thinks*
Nope, can’t think of anything.
Therefore, I will proceed to rant. Feel free to ignore.
Actually, I’m more like mumbling to myself because I hate myself for not being able to think of anything clever. π
So I’m wondering, why exactly is it you want clashing in the title? I get that it has to do with the climax, but is that really the point of the book? Perhaps it was, starting out, but hasn’t that shifted? Is the point of the book that light and darkness clash? That when light and darkness clash, light always gains the mastery? Nooooo… at least I don’t think so. The theme, as I perceive it, is faith in the promises of Christ. Or Christ’s unswerving love, though man is so unworthy. Something might be built off that.
The Promise
A Light Unbroken
Spear of Hatred, Shield of Faith
Not Forsaken
Child of Promise
Day of Reckoning
The Prophecy
Child of Prophecy
The Shield
Impossible Promise
As Prophesied
By War and FaithAaaaaaaaand I also love The Clashing.
*stares at list of titles* The longer I look at those, the lamer they become. π I’ve just dumped all my thoughts out on the page in hopes that they will be of use.
I won’t die if they aren’t.
Thankfully.
*drinks root beer*June 7, 2016 at 7:58 pm #13847When Dawn Clashes. That sounds awesome, but I’m not sure it makes any sesnse.
uum… *Steals Kate’s rootbeer to help me think* Ooh! The Clash At Dawn.
…I know. I’m so imaginative.
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June 7, 2016 at 9:37 pm #13860@anna-brie I know…those ones aren’t very good. But nothing is clicking.
@gretald The problem with Legend of the Shield was that I discovered it was actually the title of some comic series. π And nothing just seems to be snapping. And the way my book’s theme has changed, The Final Clash really doesn’t fit anymore.That’s a good point, @kate-flournoy. I don’t know why I like the word clashing so much. Perhaps I should let it go *breaks into song* *breaks off song abruptly and wonders if anyone here actually gets that reference*
Seriously though, you’re right in that the theme has changed since my original story. Not that the title ever had much to do with the theme so much as it did with the climax. And I do like The Clashing but it isn’t quite snapping. *sighs* What I’d love to have is a catchy title which grabs the readers attention at the beginning of the story and then half way though they are thrilled as they finally realize what the title means. Which brings me back to the word clash or clashing.
And Impossible Promise…that’s funny because one of my ideas on my secret page of titles was Impossible Oath. π Great minds think alike. By War and Faith is kind of cool. Not the title, but maybe it will give me an idea.
@Daeus I agree. When Dawn Clashes sounds really cool. Also, I’m afraid it doesn’t make much sense in relation to the book. How about When Shields Clash…no, that won’t work either because there is only one shield.One Shield and one Spear. A prophecy. A hidden sign. Drawing on hidden strength. A messenger discovering he’s a prince and then a king, shouldered with the sudden weight of a nation at war. A legend. The Firstflowing where the final battle is fought.
Maybe those phrases will nudge some ideas onto paper. Maybe. I’m not holding my breath. Instead I’m going to go read, and then I’ll take a shower and see if the warm water will give me any ideas.
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
June 7, 2016 at 9:44 pm #13861Hey I got the reference @Hope!!!!!!!! *dances gleeful jig*
Hidden Promises?
June 7, 2016 at 9:52 pm #13862June 7, 2016 at 10:07 pm #13863I don’t know @Hope. Just brainstorm or something. Maybe these questions will reveal some key aspect of your story
What’s one word that describes your protagonist?
What’s one word that describes your antagonist?
What’s your protagonist’s lie?
Do you have any repeated phrases throughout the story?
What swings the tide at the climax?
What is the name of the main character?
What are the story’s stakes?
What symbolism do you use in the story? Which symbols are the most unique?
What’s the saddest thing about your story?
What’s the happiest thing about your story?π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’π’
June 7, 2016 at 10:14 pm #13865June 8, 2016 at 12:42 am #13866I gotta to do this. *breaks into song*
Let it go, let it go!
Canβt hold it back anymore.
Let it go, let it go!
Turn away and slam the door.
I donβt care what theyβre going to say.
Let the storm rage on.
The cold never bothered me anyway.Sorry, I just had to do that. *Hits the submit button and goes away singing at the top of her voice.*
June 8, 2016 at 4:24 pm #13874Good idea, @daeus Annnnnd, I’m going to do it here just because.
Whatβs one word that describes your protagonist? Unbowed
Whatβs one word that describes your antagonist? Vengeful
Whatβs your protagonistβs lie? He must win on his own
Do you have any repeated phrases throughout the story? Not quotable ones
What swings the tide at the climax? Hoplessness; realization of the power of the Prince
What is the name of the main character? Ethaniel
What are the storyβs stakes? Fate of two nations and the next age
What symbolism do you use in the story? Which symbols are the most unique? The Kingβs Sign/scar; mistβ¦though thatβs more of a cool effect than symbolic; the Firstflowing
Whatβs the saddest thing about your story? Death and destruction wrought by war
Whatβs the happiest thing about your story? Victorious power of the Prince
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
June 8, 2016 at 5:03 pm #13875@hope Powerless
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