“What the BLEEP!”

 

I've wanted to write a post for Kingdom Pen on this topic for about three years now, ever since a debate I got into on the One Year Adventure Novel writing forum. Is it okay to include cussing in your story? Or is it always wrong?

Is profanity a sin?

Of course, to determine if it is wrong to include profanity in your novel, you first have to believe that it is wrong to use profanity yourself. The Bible makes it clear that profanity is a sin (Ephesians 4:29, Ephesians 5:4, Colossians 3:8, James 3:9-12, 1st Peter 3:10, etc.)

While there are those Christians who would dispute that cussing is a sin, it is not the purpose of this article to make the case profane speech is sin. For the sake of this article, I’m going to assume we all agree that cussing is a sin.

But is it wrong for your characters to cuss?

So, swearing is wrong, but does that mean we can’t use it in our stories? After all, we display other forms of sin in our stories. Theft, murder, abusive anger, lying, jealousy, the list goes on. As we spoke about regarding the need for more strong female characters in modern literature, there is a difference between depicting something, and glorifying it. What is so different about profanity? Can we not include profanity in our stories, but simply not glorify it?

I came very close to including a cuss word in one of my novels once. I wasn’t planning on having this particular villainous character swear. I didn’t write in my outline that they would use this particular word, but as I wrote this rather intense scene between my protagonist and this villain, and as the conflict heated up, and the accusations flew, it just came to me that the villain should swear. It fit. She was the kind of character who would use a cuss word, and since I had included no profanity anywhere else in the story, the word would gain shock value.

My scene froze as I debated with myself over whether or not I should include this particular swear word, and the old discussion that I was involved in on the OYAN forum came back to me. There is a time and a place for everything, right?

Though this seemed like the time and the place to include a curse word, I eventually decided against its usage for a number of reasons, five to be exact, and I figured I should share them to help any of you who may be struggling with this dilemma in your writing.

 

5 Reasons not to include profanity in your story

1. It’s lazy

As I mentioned, I felt compelled to use a cuss word for the shock value it would add to the scene, but doing so would have been weak story telling.  Attempting to communicate the vileness of a character with a curse word is just lazy. Using a cheap dirty word instead of doing the work to characterize her as a wicked person is a short-cut which would have harmed my story. I would have missed the chance to come up with a deeper, more creative and unexpected way to show what kind of person she was. Cuss words are lazy.

Cussing - Michael Hyatt

Described another way, profanity for shock almost falls more into the category of “telling” and not “showing.” It’s like saying, “Susan was a bad person, so she kicked the puppy,” instead of writing, “Susan, her mouth twisted in a grin, yanked her leg back before sending it forward in a violent kick. The steel toe of her boot landed in the puppy’s belly, causing the animal to yelp in pain as it was launched off the ground.”

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In the first instance, you understand that Susan isn’t very nice. She’s a puppy kicker, we get it, but it’s not very compelling. It doesn’t paint a picture of her evilness. In the second example, we see the glee in her face, we see the steel-toed boots hitting the poor defenseless puppy. Why is she even wearing steel-toed boots in the first place? It must be for the sole purpose of kicking puppies! What a horrid person!

In the same way, just having a few bad words come out of a character’s mouth isn’t really going to help the reader see what makes them evil. We’re not going to learn anything about them. Profanity doesn't make your story or characters anymore "edgy" or interesting. Don’t be lazy. Don’t have your characters cuss.

 

2. Your characters aren’t real people

I really hate to be the one to break this to you, but your characters aren’t really people.

I know we writers like to pretend our characters are real people; indeed, it’s essential we feel as though they are real. If we don’t, then our readers definitely won’t, and they will never connect to our characters, and our stories will never be read.

That said, we are still the ones writing the words. We are the ones creating the dialogue. We can’t include profanity in our stories, and then point fingers at our characters.

“No, it wasn’t me! It was that darn (see, no swear!) Jedediah! He lost both of his parents and was raised by a gang of professional cussers. They cuss for a living! Of course Jedediah is going to cuss! I keep telling him to STOP but he won’t! He's uncontrollable!!!”

Yeah…no. You wrote those words. You are responsible for them.

This reality became even more apparent to me when I considered the possibility of reading my story out loud if it had that cuss word in it. Whoa…I couldn’t read that! Why does merely writing the bad word not seem as bad as speaking it? Does writing it and claiming it came from a character you created really free you from responsibility? I don’t think so.

 

3. It would make your story unrealistic

But, hey! If Jedediah really was raised by a gang of professional cussers, then how could he NOT cuss? Isn’t that unrealistic?

The most common argument I have seen for including cussing in your story is that it is “realistic.” True enough, profanity has become commonplace in our culture. If you’ve ever been to public school, you’ll probably hear five to ten F-bombs just in the few minutes between classes. Instead of someone saying, “This lemonade is good stuff!” they will say, “This lemonade is good BLEEP” Instead of asking someone, “What were you thinking?” it’s, “What the BLEEP* were you thinking?” Cussing is normal. Cussing is the vernacular. It’s literally the “vulgar” language of today.

Well, if it’s so common in the modern day, and we are writing a modern-day story, we should probably have some cussing going on, right?

Yes and no. The problem is if you take that line of reasoning to its logical end, then you’re going to have to have a BLEEP ton of swearing in your story (pardon my French). Just using a cuss word here and there isn’t going to cut it. In fact, it’s just going to make your story seem even more unrealistic. If you’re going to open the Pandora’s box of profanity, then you really have to go all the way.

Reading your story out loud is definitely going to be awkward.

Instead, if you want to tap into this realism, but you don’t want to fill up your story with profanity, you can describe the character’s vocabulary without including actual curse words. You can say that a character, “Swore, cursed, profaned, blasphemed, etc.” You don’t have to actually use the words. This technique fits closer with the Biblical method for describing sin. The Bible mentions terrible sins, but it doesn’t go into graphic detail describing the sin. We can know your character is using profanity, without you actually having to subject us to it.

The point of our stories shouldn't be to show how terrible the world can be. I think we already know. What many don't know, is that light really is stronger than darkness. We include darkness in our stories to show the light; the focus is the light, and going over the top to describe darkness by using graphic detail or profanity just isn't helpful, and puts sin before our minds which isn't healthy. We should be writers of light, showing the greater reality that good is stronger than evil, and will win out in the end.

 

4. Tolkien didn't include swearing

Was The Lord of the Rings a pretty good story?

Yes it was.

Did Tolkien include cuss words?

No he didn’t.

That’s good enough for me.

 

5. Will your little sister read it?

Finally, I knew I couldn’t use a cuss word because my younger sister would read my story. I didn’t want her to read that word. I don’t want something I created to have that kind of filth in them. There are better ways to portray evil, much better.

George Washington once wrote of profanity, "It is a vice so mean and low without any temptation that every man of sense and character detests and despises it." Do we really want to include language in our stories that anyone with sense and character will detest it? Will our story really bring glory to God with such language? I don't think so. If we as Christians are saying it's okay to use profanity, we are sending a message I don't think we want to send. We don't want profanity distracting from the truth of Christ. 

As writers, we have to be careful with what we write. We certainly don’t want to harm others with our stories, and using profanity has the potential to do so.

You don’t need to include swearing in your stories. In fact, I would say you’re better off without it. Don’t take the easy way out. You don’t need it for realism. Remember that we are responsible for the words we write.

Write courageously. Write well. Write for Christ.


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