Zelphia Peterson

@anna-brie How about we start at 2:00pm (aus) 😛
How long would you like to write for?

No problem at all. We can try tomorrow. (Sleep well tonight. 😀 )
If anyone else wants to try it, let me know.

@aratrea If you have the time, I’ve love your feedback with the rest of the story. 😀

This just keeps making me think of Prince Caspian and the underground fight. That scene is done so well, with Caspian and Peter counting. Maybe there is something there that will help.

There once was a lizard called Ted.
Who lived in an old tin shed.
His head was dark blue,
And his tail was too,
But he wished that they had been red.

“Wren?” I was stunned. “Wren, like the bird?”
“Yes.”
“Oh.” I thought I might have had a better name then that. Still I can vaguely remember liking it.
“Dad use to called me his Jenny Wren,” I cry, triumphantly.
Gavin nods and smiles.
“I’m starting to remember,” I crow.
“Good,” said Gavin.
“Now what?” I ask.
Gavin looks at me.
“What? Am I suppose…[Read more]

Or even 0:45 – 0:60?

Sounds like fun @lightningmouse. Do you want to try it for 15min with me? Maybe from 0:35 – 0:50?

Oops. Try you again. @cahndida-serkhaman

oops. Try you agian. @cahndida-serkhaman

Question: (@spradlin, @daeus, @cahndida serkhaman, @jadamae, @sarah-h)
If you were illustrating this for a child, how would you illustrate this verse.

In a land long ago,
When men were all bad,
They stole and they murdered,
Which made the Lord sad.

I obviously don’t want to scare them, with people killing people, but I don’t want to make the…[Read more]

@spradlin Come and check this poem out. What do you think?

*blanches* raspberry!?! How can you eat those? (I can’t eat blackberries either. I do like blueberries and strawberries though.)
Thank you. Now, an illustrator….. (or not! 😛 )

I try to tag you and get it wrong! @daeus Try that instead. 😛

OK. So I’ve been working hard on this poem. I have added some more stanzas in case it does become a book. So the targeted audience is young children. With that in mind what do you think?
I’ll tag you just so you do see it @deaus. 😀

In a land long ago,
When men were all bad,
They stole and they murdered,
Which made the Lord sad.

He said,…[Read more]

@anna-brie do you want to start with half an hour with me?

@kate-flournoy, Ah! Thank you for clearing that up! I was getting confused between personal character goals and the main story. So now that I think about it, in my WIP the main story goal is to defeat the bad guys, like you said, but the MC’s goal is to find love. The MC is an orphan, and she’s had a pretty bad life so far…so her goal is to…[Read more]

@hope, I’m not sure if this is what you’re thinking, but here’s an idea: when the battle between the MC and the villain is over and the villain’s men find out that their leader is dead, they could just run. That’s usually what happens at the end of battles…the men are really fighting for their leader, and when the leader’s gone, they’ve got no…[Read more]