Hannah Carmichael

@Daeus oh dear. That’s awful. Try a little perspective next time. I hear it works wonders.

@Daeus WHAT YOU WERE SITTING HERE WORRYING ALL MORNING??? 😛 Loosen up a bit. XD

@Daeus sorry I’m late again… @Hope wasn’t kidding when she said I had mice in the wifi box. Seriously. Twelve of them. They were promptly ejected, but they did mess things up quite a bit… 😛
And that definitely sounds like it could work; your idea. I especially like the idea about the letter. One word of caution— I can tell you from personal…[Read more]

Your graphic designer is going to hate me for that… 😛

@Daeus here I am! Returned from the dead!

*dives into critic-mode* Okay, I like it? First problem is it doesn’t fit the genre. Not sure it quite looks like a romance, but it doesn’t really fit the story. Some of that may be because of the boring brick wall but you said that’s going, so… yeah. For an action/adventure though it’s too calm and…[Read more]

No… maybe I should just wait until the internet connection isn’t so spotty. That shouldn’t affect it, but maybe it does. And I’m about to lose signal anyway…

Huh… that is weird. I’m having internet troubles, maybe that’s it?

@Daeus it’s not showing up…

@Daeus oohhh, I really like it. I would say yes, probably better to get your name matching the title. Also, a bit more technical piece of criticism here… my inner graphic designer is screaming at me that there should be more motion in the picture. It’s a lovely dramatic picture (love the shadows of the houses and such) but a lot more could be…[Read more]

@Ethryndal Certainly!

@jess Yes! I’ll be in prayer for his upcoming procedure.

I’m still here @Daeus. I’ll probably go for another hour, but we’ll see.

@Daeus, pretty good.
I wrote 1,400 words, so I’m really pleased. I’m going to continue for at least another hour. @aella, @winter-rose

@Emma-Flournoy, Yeah, he helped, so he knows that the machine is good! 😛

@aella @winter-rose @daeus, I’ll join you. 🙂

@Ethryndal, I didn’t see this until now, but I’ll definitely pray.

Quick Update: My dad’s appointment was rescheduled to today, and they found out that his retina was detaching. 🙁 He’s is going to have surgery today (it lasts about 4ish hours). Praise God that this happened before January first, as insurance should cover the costs! He…[Read more]

@Daeus soooo… I read Cry the Beloved Country. I absolutely loved it. It’s a really unique book— not just the odd original punctuation, but the style, and the relative flatness of the plot, and yet it’s such a stirring book. It’s like reading a poem or something. 😀 Also it was a thinking book, not a preaching book, which I love for obvious…[Read more]

@Daeus yes. Much better. I agree with @Jess that that sentence still seems to be having trouble— perhaps because all subjects of that sentence are not necessarily in the same categorical thought-family, if you know what I mean?— but otherwise I love it.

I like it. 🙂 The sentence:

Setting out to find new strength, he plummets into tangled plots, tragedies, and the deep puzzle of his destiny put in question by a cryptic vision.

It seems a little wordy still, but otherwise I like it. I agree with dragon snapper that you do tend to use “his” a lot, but it didn’t bother me.

@Daeus