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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
God can also deliver us over to our sins and temptations…another random thought. (see Romans 1)
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
No, you’re fine!!!
I just can never seem to think things through before I say them! I reply too fast…
Thanks for helping me, this gave me a lot to think about! (you too @jonas !) Today I developed sooo much of the plot thanks to you guys!
No it wasn’t your mistake, it was MY mistake…I still feel bad for confusing everybody…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
I’m getting to the point where I don’t even know what I mean 😭
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Goodness I realized I keep contradicting myself.
Sorry guys.
I say things without thinking them through. (blame it on the coffee!)
I know I said there can’t be redemption for Cass, but I didn’t really mean that.
Ugh. Sorry for the confusion!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Holy cow this thing blew up into a bigger thing than I intended and I feel bad for some reason sorry :/
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
But there’s a problem there. When we chose to live in sin, or even directly comit evil, there is still hope for us until death. Even the vilest of sinner can be redeemed by the blood of Christ. If you make Pythonos unredeemable, you are almost saying that the blood of Christ is not enough for them. You know? Which is why r…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Pythonos could become loyal to the Great One again…but why would they want to? They lose all ability to love or care or feel regret and are consumed by evil and the desire for power. I just don’t know how that could work without digging a hole for myself XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
But Cass becomes a Pythonos, so there’s no redemption. At least, i can’t think of a way that he could be redeemed.
(See post above where I replied to Jonas)
NO I AM NOT KILLING ELOY NO NO NO I love him too much ahhh
Also…Cass doesn’t just get tortured.
He HELPS TORTURE THEM. So that won’t really work…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 6 months, 1 week ago
BUT ONCE HE CONVERTS HER SHE’LL REALIZE SHE LOVES HIM I KNOW IT
and yes I know Sabina will come to her senses eventually!
I won’t lose hope. XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
I said it was a couple posts back….XD XD I thought it was clear 😬😂😂
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Lilitu was kind of my “you’re never too far gone” person, because his parents are Jraldath and Selena! There’s going to be this epic confrontation scene where he wrestles with the knowledge that he was meant to be evil from the moment he was born. Does that work? Or do I still need Cassian?
Because that’s a good idea, but I feel like…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
it’s right above where HighScribe says “no spoilers” and right below the post where you said this:
I don’t think this was on your radar when Cass was first introduced, and in several of the early chapters. (am i right?) so, you need to show a little bit of that in him. just a teeny bit. Maybe he can’t stand it if one of hios bro…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 6 months, 1 week ago
*gasp* THAT WAY AARON AND TURIN COULD BE BROTHERS FOR REALZ
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 6 months, 1 week ago
yesss! Idk I just love her sooo much!
I am also shipping her and Aaron so if they don’t kiss at ALL during the whole book I will be sorely disappointed :/
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Also have you seen Sef and Lilitu’s character arcs I posted a couple posts back? I tagged Whaley but I’d love to hear your thoughts too!!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Ohhhh okay makes sense!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
That’s fair lol
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
thanks!!! I’ve been having a lot of deep thoughts lately XD lol
I don’t think this was on your radar when Cass was first introduced, and in several of the early chapters. (am i right?) so, you need to show a little bit of that in him. just a teeny bit. Maybe he can’t stand it if one of hios brothers is better at him in som…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 6 months, 1 week ago
Sooo
I think I have an idea for Lilitu’s internal conflict!
I’ve been plotting a lot today, if you couldn’t tell 😂
Sef is self depricating, like you said. She’s more like “I’m stupid. I’m worthless. I’m not worthy of love.”
What I did is prayed before developing characters today and asked God to show me verses to base the…[Read more]
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