Raegan Aubrey

@ellette-giselle

For some reason I thought of you IMMEDIATELY (probably because we’ve had so many conversations about slapping your writing on paper and NEVER GOING BACK (something that I struggle to not do since I’m a perfectionist lol))

It’s okay!!! I completely understand and I can’t even imagine how hard the past few weeks have been for…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you want some ideas or need a brainstorming partner just lmk!

I will!!! TYSM!!! 🙃

Yes I totally get it!! You definitely don’t have to go through and try to fix everything in the first draft 🥴

ahhhh hahaha yeah, I’d definitely get in trouble with @ellette-giselle if I did that…. (jk jk h…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I use Pinterest or simply type what I want into a search engine and click “Images”.

I think I’m gonna take Chase out of the hospital now.

Though, I could’ve brought him back earlier, seen as how no one apparently knew he went there anyways

Chase

Chase walked slowly down the sidewalk, looking down at his shoes. His left arm was in a sling, his head hurt terribly, and he was tired, but otherwise okay. He halted his slow walk…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@ellette-giselle

If Nar is his sister, he’s going to be furious that his new enemy is carrying around pictures of his sister. If Nar is a crush then he’s going to be really mad because it doesn’t seem like he would want everyone in kingdom come to know that he carries around her picture.

Nar is his sister, and he is very protective of her.…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@ellette-giselle

Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

Lol

You kidding me? The police have already tried to take Alpha (when he stabbed Jep and Chase went to the hospital) and well, Alpha hasn’t stepped foot in the station yet.

@theducktator @ellette-giselle

I bet he’s gonna die in the end.

He can’t die; I like him too much!

Oh dear…well, two more stories left and then you’ll know. Don’t worry, Baron will be happy with the ending.

 I would love to see this published someday!

Hopefully sometime in Spring I will submit it to a publisher. Fingers crossed though cuz…[Read more]

@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@raxforge (I changed a few things in the story btw) @ellette-giselle @keilah-h @whalekeeper @hybridlore @theducktator

Story 10!

Only two more stories and then The Baron Chronicles will come to a close. Thx for reading this far! 💜

 
Fire
The blaze in the fireplace crackled. Baron balanced a pencil on his hand, staring down at his rose drawing on…[Read more]

@loopylin

… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol

•  A pocket knife (are you surprised lol)
• some loose change
• some random things he picked up like an acorn probably (Strange new world, strange new things, random things in pockets)
• a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)