Trahia the Minstrel

@linus-smallprint ooh interesting!!

Alan’s character development is showing through! It does seem a tiny bit sudden, but I don’t know cause I’ve never actually seen a person get saved and them follow their life immediately afterward. I was saved when I was really young and effectively don’t even remember it, so I can’t even use myself as an…[Read more]

@grcr very cool, and I like his name!

@ellette-giselle I echo Linus’s statement–this was a great way to re-introduce Adrian to the narrative!

@power I had a song on in the background that started epic then turned really goofy as I read your little poem and it was perfect for it lolllll

thing is, it was by complete coincidence.

@freed_and_redeemed oooh nice scene!!

@ellette-giselle no it’s not bad, I just haven’t read it yet. Lol

@grcr very cool!

also I agree with whalekeeper that the lower half of the body is a nightmare. I can’t draw the standard 8-head body length; all my characters end up six or so heads in proportional height because any time I try to draw legs as long as everyone says to, it always makes them look way too skinny and stretched.

Maybe that’s…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @hybridlore wherever you decide to move this discussion, can you tag me too? I’m having fun learning about this.

@whaley wow I would watch a TV show or read a multi-part comic about those numbers as you think of them, that’s super cool.

@linus-smallprint ooof Ender’s Game.

Good example for a dystopian writer, horribly graphic writing (and also the occasional curse words? I remember there being Marvel-level cursing but not much worse).

Luckily I’m not the kind who’s perturbed by violence in writing. Watching it would be a different story, but reading that kind of thing really…[Read more]

You’re not wantonly throwing bloody battle scenes in. You’re writing a realistic impression of a story.

Remember the missionaries to that one South American tribe that were brutally murdered, but the survivors came back to that tribe to continue the mission? Stories like that are what your writing reminds me of. This sounds really weird, but…[Read more]

do the songs have to be lyrical or can some of them be instrumentals?

@ellette-giselle Believe me, these stories are marketed for 8-year-olds:

• Wings of Fire (dragon series I read once with a good deal of violence. One character’s death is so graphic the writer didn’t even describe it, although that was in a side story that I didn’t read though cause it didn’t grab me.)
• Warrior cats series (LOTS of war and…

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@freed_and_redeemed yessss I will totally do that!!

now to find some songs.

@freed_and_redeemed just saw this and AWW LEON WHYYYY

it’s such a good piece though

@ellette-giselle not a ramble! At least you’re rambling about your writing and not about something random…..as I do quite commonly…..eheheheheh you remember THOSE conversations which I’m NOT gonna bring up on this forum after this lolllll

And I think 13 is fine tbh. Your books are actually not that bad in terms of violence so far.

@ellette-giselle aww cute, although I have NO idea who Kenna and Zeke are lolll

@ellette-giselle 17, almost 18. Remember how I was making a big deal about Sabina getting married that young because I could barely imagine getting married at my age? lol

@ellette-giselle If you can’t find any way to trim it down, I’d rather you keep the whole thing than delete it entirely.

@ellette-giselle whoa I love that map!!

also, I agree with @hybridlore about how the section’s a little long. I realize that the answers to Joseph’s questions have to be properly explained–after all, I would say corrupting God’s message is far worse then never including it in the first place–but I, like her (hybridlore you are a girl right??…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle thank you!!! I had to do his eye like three times before I got it right. Same with the guy’s hand.

@rae certainly! I’m not sure when I’ll find the motivation for it lol, but I’m definitely gonna write something for it.

@ellette-giselle oof poor guy.

That’s an age where it’s gotten much harder to just kinda brush it off, but at the same time you still don’t have the capability of fully understanding it yet.