TheShadow

@jonas

Mr. Gregory 

“So, will you fight? Or do you yield?”

“False dichotomy,” Gregory grumbled.

“What was that, tyrant?”

Several students had stopped dancing and were now watching them, some curious and some nervous.

“The rules are in place so that these students can enjoy their dance as much as possible, I’m sure. You are not only breakin…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I think you’re writing her pretty well except she probably isn’t completely calm rn. But she would be pretending to be Babs’ sake, so nvm, it’s good.

Felicity

“Like… angsty depressed teens? Or people who pretend they aren’t depressed, but then you look at them and you can clearly see that they… Ohhh wait, I think I see one.”…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Well, your punctuation is fine…and it is soooo not as cringy as what I wrote a year ago!

About this scene above:

Proud of it, NO!

Still like it because off Krogen, yeah.

You will see what I mean when I finish it…

@savannah_grace2009

oh my gosh….lol I was reading it and I was like, oh it’s really good! and then I read this sentence:

I can’t tell you what Nahim’s face looked like because he never showed it to anyone.
And then I laughed.

Not mean at all. I consider that sentence the thing the sums up my first draft. Awfulness, awfulness, awfulness. Except.…[Read more]

Oh this is great! I still like this scene…

Nahim walked on. Suddenly his boots hit something solid and metal with a clank. Nahim walked about. (Ruee, what kinda of a sentence is that?!) It appeared to be a circular metal something. *Nahim discovers it’s a base, gets inside, blah blah blah* “Hello, Hello!” (Oh, did I mention I had no idea what…

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@rae

oh my gosh….lol I was reading it and I was like, oh it’s really good! and then I read this sentence:

I can’t tell you what Nahim’s face looked like because he never showed it to anyone.

And then I laughed.

sorry if that sounds mean…..

And now for the worst thing I have ever written:

“It worked!” Jorryn cries.…

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I shall keep the spelling for effect…

Chapter 1 Nahim and Mandin

Nahim sat cofortably near Mandin liking out over the lake Gaylax. He was young, only being 19 years in age, Mandin was 5 years older and had more expierance but they still got along together well. I can’t tell you what Nahim’s face looked like because he never showed it to anyone.…

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@savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else

Ready for some pieces of writing from when I had absolutely no idea what I was doing?

@whalekeeper

Okay, I think Chase’s stutter may return…

@trailblazer

idk….two teeth on the bottom in the back. (not wisdom teeth)

I have teeth that are baby teeth, but there aren’t any adult teeth to replace them, so I was just gonna have baby teeth forever. But the dentist thought they were just gonna break apart someday so he pulled them….

@trailblazer

Oh no!! That sounds horrible!!!

4 hours later and I can actually feel my face and talk and eat food!!! YAY!

@jonas

okay! 🙂

@whalekeeper

Felicity

“Hey, wait, hold on.” Felicity held both of Babs hands in hers and looked her in the eye. “Whatever’s happening, it’s not one bit your fault. Marcel’s not a child.” She quickly scanned the room, trying to spot Calvin or Lois. “Would looking for him help you feel better?”

I have a headache thanks to my little brother, ask me another day, but rn…all I can think about is dragons and the philological warfare of sirens…

@jonas

Mr. Gregory 

“If you would like to keep your boots, and you are not going to dance, I suggest you then step outside.”

@jonas Don’t worry, he won’t fight Riina.  I’m going to do something else

@jonas

He’s a grumpy old war veteran who can use magic but prefers to use weapons. He’s also the best sword fighter from his world. He only teaches math at this school to keep an eye on Felicity and Lois, my other characters.

@jonas Mr. Gregory. He’s also known as the General to people from his world.