TheShadow

@ellette-giselle

I love how you introduced Cassian’s character. I mean, man, I liked him from the firs paragraph.

Oops…I was going to quote you but forgot….lol

I would like to know more about the Paynes as well. Like, why are they outcast, what is the race mixing thing, etc. etc. If that gets explained later then you can just leave it and l…

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@savannah_grace2009

Well, I have my main points written out. But not the WHOLE thing. Like I know where I’m going with all this, and I know the main plot twists, climax, ending, all that. I didn’t just write the whole plot though. It’s more in like bullet points, if that makes sense.

I’m about to be a senior. Nope, not graduated yet. Almost!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Chase

She’s beautiful. Chase watched Sef with eyes of green and blue. “Y-your l-like my m-mom.” Chase caught her gaze, exploring the depths of her green eyes with large, childish eyes. Catching himself, he quickly turned away, a little color coming to his pale face.

@savannah_grace2009

Ah, that makes more sense about the trees. It’s an interesting idea. I’m excited to see how it develops.

The sickness also makes sense too!

I would like to know more about the Paynes as well. Like, why are they outcast, what is the race mixing thing, etc. etc. If that gets explained later then you can just leave it and…[Read more]

Well, there has never been a day when I can’t write.

Girl, I wish. I go to public school and so I leave at 7:30 and don’t get back home until almost 5, and that’s without sports and plays and other things! When volleyball starts I won’t get home until like 7:30!!!!

What grade are you in? I honestly assumed you were graduated lol

Most of the tim…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

No, i don’t have anything written out. I mean, I  know what’s going to happen, but I really don’t want to say. However, if you need me to tell you for editing purposes then I will.

Okay…you need to write it out in an organized plot.

I know it’s boring and annoying, but before you write anymore, you really should start writin…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oooooo So, so good!! I LOVE the name Cassian!! Oh man, this is so good! I can already envision this going so, so good. Oh man, I love it!

Really?? thank you so much! Honestly I get a little mad at my story sometimes because it’s not as good as I wanted it to be XD

Ok, the killing the tree thing was a little strange. Explanation…

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@savannah_grace2009

No, i don’t have anything written out. I mean, I  know what’s going to happen, but I really don’t want to say. However, if you need me to tell you for editing purposes then I will.

ALSO GIRL HOW DO YOU WRITE 20 CHAPTERS IN A DAY

Well, there has never been a day when I can’t write. If I don’t have time to write it out on the…[Read more]

@jonas

I kind of have the opposite problem: my style has shifted to be a very strict 3rd-person limited POV, which means all information has to come out very naturally and it takes me way too long to explain things.

Honestly, me too lol

I think what happened is I overcorrected XD

@ellette-giselle

I was mostly asking about what happens in your story, rather than the details about why you wrote it and the theme.

It’s okay, I’m bad at explaining my stories…I end up confusing EVERYONE..

Do you have everything that happens in your story written out?

Like an outline/plot?

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@savannah_grace2009

Oooooo So, so good!! I LOVE the name Cassian!! Oh man, this is so good! I can already envision this going so, so good. Oh man, I love it!

Ok, the killing the tree thing was a little strange. Explanation please!!! But I guess we’ll get to that later.

Also, I would like to know a little more about this sickness. why is it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No!!! nononono!! No spoilers!!! Spoilers are not allowed. N.O. They are illegal!!!!

Yay!! Can’t wait for the next chapter.

However…I have a bad habit of info dumping backstory in the first chapter

Why does that sound so familiar…….. *looks over the last 20 first chapters I’ve written in the past year* Oh… that’s w…[Read more]

@jonas sorry, I was going to wait for you to post the next ones….but since @ellette-giselle wants to look at the next one, and there shouldn’t be any more after this for a while, it shouldn’t be too panic inducing…lol

Chapter 2

Found

Cassian’s bare feet flew over the verdant carpet, effortlessly leaping over sticks and stones in his pat…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

why Nico left, where is the baby from the prologue, who are the two different groups here. I know you have hinted at it a little in the prologue, but I’d still like more back story and more info. I tend to be a little more like Tolkine in writing, as in, I have a backstory for everyone, and most of the time, %60 percent of the b…

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@trailblazer

speaking like an adult to then sleeping on Flavia’s lap, which to me seems more like something a six-year-old would do.

Ok, that makes sense. I can switch him to leaning on her shoulder.

maybe do something like this the first time you mention it: Jesus Christ, the Prince of Life.

I like that. Sounds good. T…[Read more]

@rae

Awesome! I have a really good idea for this one! I can’t wait to blow your mind with a…… very bad impression of him. lol. We’ll see if I can pull my idea off and if it actully looks as good as I think it will.

You DO NOT want to see me previous drawing attempts. They were just creepy. I don’t really have anything else though…I’ll try d…

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@highscribeofaetherium

@theshadow

Great guys!!! I can’t wait to see what you give me to draw! I’ll do multiple characters for each of you, you’ll just have to send them one at a time. Whoever sends one first gets it drawn first. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

What is the plot of my story!!? Oh girl you can’t make me do that. I HATE spoilers. I can’t stand that. *sob* *sob*

I mean….. I guess I could try a little…… OK…. let’s see.

I guess, well…. Ah, I’m no good at this! OK, I guess it started when I overheard a conversation from a group of young men saying Christianity…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time…[Read more]

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time period they live in, (or…[Read more]