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@ellette-giselle

Now someone is starting to get tangled in the is-he-is-he-not? phase. Love it!!

I can’t make up my mind about Ignatius XD

@stephie

How did I forget that I did not forget your tag?

Good question XD

@princesachronicle22

Alright that sounds good!

@stephie

That’s a good perspective, I’m not sure yet if I’m actually ready to write it yet since it would be  lot of research on radiation and might make me a little sad. That’s one of the reasons I don’t like dystopian since it’s usually pretty depressing, like The Hunger Games or The Tripods. We’ll see though, I’ll probably try to lighten it up…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you for sending him! I love drawing for people!

Of course, thanks so much for drawing him! Also, somehow I forgot to mention this, but he’s a knight.

@ellette-giselle

Ooh that’s really good advice, I’ll keep it in mind, thanks!!

@ellette-giselle

Okay, sorry this took so long, but here’s the character I finally decided on:

Name: Eldred

Age: 21

Gender: male

Clothing: medieval tunic and leggings accustom to knights, as well as a cross that hangs around his neck

Time period (Or the time period the fashion replicates): medieval era

Physical appearance: tall, muscular, j…[Read more]

@keilah-h

lol yeah I don’t know who that is

He’s an author that writes a lot of dark  futuristic sci-fi stuff.

Whenever my dad tells me about the latest sci-fi book he’s been reading, I decide I want to write a science-fiction AU of whatever my current work is

Ooh, that’s cool!

lol i’m sorry for diverting the topic that was too random

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@whalekeeper

We often become blind to the flaws in our greatest loves… man, I’m spurting poetry!

Lol well you’re right.

Drama is fine as long as you can see everything from a bird’s eye view, and you seem to be a pretty practical person so far.

Thanks! I don’t want to make something that’s super melodramatic though (still figuring out what that means XD).

@keilah-h

Yeah, I sometimes forget to make sure what I’m writing isn’t too dark for me (I think I’ve been reading too much Ray Bradbury lately). Thanks!

@ellette-giselle

Note: There is no description in this one of the courtyard because the description would be in the chapter before.

Okay, that makes sense!

Chapter 9 was good, I like the contrast of Julius’ superstition and Marcus’ faith.

He looked at Ignatius closely. There was something in his tone…

Okay, but this makes me think Ignatius is tr…[Read more]

@rae

It’s not exact, but I am proud to announce I finished around 12 hours of writing! I wrote somewhere around 9000 words, but after going through and editing sections, I was left with only about 8700 words of progress.

Congratulations!! That’s awesome!!!

How’d you two do?

Not great, I got a severe case of writers block then ultimately had to st…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that was really good! I like what you said about the light shining in the darkness. Thanks!

@whalekeeper

I guess I never thought about it that way. Tbh, the only reason the post apocalyptic world exists is because of the main character (he didn’t cause it, but you’ll see why in a second). The main character is supposed to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

are you threatening my character? Isn’t Ignatius just a nice soldier boy who really wants to help Marcus?

Yes I’m threatening him XD. He’s still a praetorian, so I’m not going to trust him completely. I don’t know, the way he responded to Julius’ answers sounded like he was suspicious of Marcus…. Then again, maybe he is just a nic…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

The last scene was sooo cute, I liked it a lot! Also Julius’ internal dialogue and conflict was good. Ignatius, if you lay a finger on Marcus, it’s not ending well for you!

One thing that I think you could add is more description of the places though, such as when Julius and Ignatius are talking.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, and I feel you on that, I have way too many side characters that I have yet to develop lol.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, a few critiques on chapter 7. I think you could show Flavia and Marcus’ relationship a bit more since we haven’t seen a lot of her.

Marcus could probably be shown to be more upset after talking with Julius, since that was his best friend.

Otherwise it was good, the ending of the chapter made me smile.

@rae

Sorry to hear about that, and I’ll pray for her. Also I second Ellette on that notion, chocolate or sugar will probably help.

@ellette-giselle

I finished the chapter, and THAT’S SO CUTE!! Marcus totally deserves that happiness!!! I do have a few critiques, so is it okay if I could give you them on your WIP topic?