TheLoonyOne

@mineralizedwritings

Ok, so you are spot on with the relationship thing. Basically, when he was a kid his only friend was Elissa and then she moves away. He had already been using the simulation a little because his mom had one and so started using it more and more often. He just doesn’t try to build any more relationships and stays on the…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Here’s the link to what I have so far. Thank you for reading!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aZ_X4DSJwadsDv8cEhBJE3KZ3sw2OZIuwYqjoCLV8aY/edit?usp=sharing

@mineralizedwritings

I’ve actually been having a tough time with Milo and goals. Because he is addicted to the simulation he doesn’t really have any goals except level up on the simulation. So I guess I’m giving him goals. Shoving them in his face. Same with the drive. What drives him? Pretty much nothing except the simulation. So I have to give…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much for reading it!

So, Milo’s features. I didn’t actually think about it until I was making character charts so I’ll probably go back and add it.

A lot of it will actually take place in the outside world, more and more as Milo uses the simulation less. But outside outside not as much. The simulation was made…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Thanks! Also, it’s not dystopian as I usually picture it (as in the government is clearly up to things and there is a lot of death). I think it is a little closer to Fahrenheit 451 in that it has more social problems than government problems. But not even that, though. My best explanation would be Sci-Fi with obvious social…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh yeah, it does. It’s all for my grade. Although, at this point, I care more about the novel than the grade. I’m planning on writing it all in the semester and then going through and heavily editing it. And add a lot of chapters in the middle cause they are not giving me enough for my precious character growth!

Yup, short…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

First Chapter:

The woman that sat across from him was the definition of perfection. Her stunning eyes glinted and brought out her beautiful hair. With unnatural grace, she reached forward to grab her glass and brought it to her lips. The woman took a sip before speaking.

“Thank you, Nolan, for taking me here. Bonduelle is s…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Thank you! I’ve got grammarly, so grammar shouldn’t be too much of a problem. My biggest things are the story, if it makes sense, and if the actual writing flows well.

Don’t worry, I absolutely understand! I’m really busy right now, too. I would just love some extra feedback. And if you know anyone that might be interested,…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

C’mon KP, work. It’s just one problem, though, I can still do most things!

Thank you! (I got a couple of them from name generators 😐 I live off of mithril and mages)

The only reason I’m getting anywhere on this is that it’s for my Novel in a Semester class I’m taking. 🤣 It’s making me push past procrastination. Or at least…[Read more]

@loopylin

Thanks!!!! 😁😊

They’re actually both in chapter six, which I am… working on. 😐 But I’ll send it to you once it’s finished! I think Grant is slowly replacing Cammie as my favorite, too.

(Elissa is the one we were talking about earlier. You gave me the idea, so thanks! 🙂

@freedomwriter76

woops. I messed up your tag. Anyway, I attempted a blurb! And KP isn’t working so, yea. Tell me what you think!

He took the maglev train.

Milo Trone has been living his life inside a simulation. Every part of his life feeds into it. It surrounded him in his childhood and stayed. He has a lowly job as a maintenance worker at…[Read more]

@freedomwriter @loopylin @mineralizedwritings

So, I attempted a blurb. 😐 And KP won’t let me go to my profile page so I’m stuck here. Tell me what you think?! 😊

He took the maglev train.

Milo Trone has been living his life inside a simulation. Every part of his life feeds into it. It surrounded him in his childhood and stayed. He works a…[Read more]

@loopylin @power

Yaas! Lemon Head as a nickname! And she can have a real name too, cause that’s how nicknames work. Or not. Who knows? (Loopy does) 😄

@loopylin

Oh, I recognize the names but I can’t think of what it is! And Lemon-Head is adorable. I love your art for her, too!

Anyway, names. I have absolutely no reasoning or meaning behind these, they just popped into my head. 😊

1. Eda

2. Something that starts with a J. She seems like a J. Don’t question it. 😆

3. Bella

4. Hanna (I’ve…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

That is so cool! Crafting is the best when you can use what you made. But yeah, it can be expensive. I craft a little but mostly just draw. I don’t do one thing a lot, but occasionally try making new things.

~Edgy Pretending~ 😆 It’s true, though. Kids can be dark. 😳 That is a morbid way to die. That’s cool, though! Liquified…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Leatherworking sounds so cool! I can also see how it would be expensive. 😐 What else have you made?

That’s so cool that you got to see the bird! And there is some good ice cream in Coeur d’Alene. That sounds like a lot of fun to do with your family!

I used to have a cardboard castle, too. My childhood is chock-full of…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh cool, you made it? What is it made of?

We have to take the driver’s Ed class, then our six hours of driving and six hours of watching with an instructor, then 50 hours or six months of permit driving, 10 at night. Then you take the tests and you get your license!

Oh, don’t worry, come to Idaho! We love the nice people.…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh no, It got stolen! I’m sorry!

In Idaho, you have to finish all six drives before you get your driver’s permit. So, two more drives with the instructor and I’m on the streets 😲 You also have to have six hours of time as the passenger watching another driver so I’ve been doing all my drives with a friend. It’s been a lot of…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Ugh, school. 🙄 I’m doing driver’s Ed too! I have my fifth drive tomorrow.

Bird-watching sounds so cool! Hopefully, you can do it again someday. It sounds like you have some good memories. I don’t live in a big city but it’s growing bigger. Lots of new houses. So glad about the place I live in, though, because you don’t have…[Read more]