Elizabeth

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

@xonos-darkgrate  *shudders*  I don’t think it was too dark.  And it’s very well-written!

@mariposa  Yes…but very ill indeed.  🙂

@xonos-darkgrate I know some people who would find that too graphic, but I don’t. I think there’s a good light/dark contrast and it doesn’t make me feel empathetic toward the villain so I’d say this is good so long as it’s for a good purpose. 🙂

@dekreel  EEEEEEEKKKKK!!!!!!  Just yes.  I think this calls for a party.  Cake’s on me.

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Oh, and I didn’t read your excerpt either. If I did, I’d want to know what basic content was in it first and I might not be able to get it in anyways.

@xonos-darkgrate

I’ll just stop in real quick to drop a few bits of meat, but if you want to hear a lot about this subject, we have several articles on it.

The thing I think is crucial to understand with content is that you want sympathy but you do not want empathy.

Sympathy is when you feel for or understand another person’s e…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

@leumeister I like Camille, Raphael, and Tristan. Tristan is one of my favorite names!

@leumeister  My votes are Celeste, Raphael, and Tristan.  🙂

@catwing

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Well, @dekreel and @perfectfifths stole my thunder.  But I did know it!   🙂

@dragon-snapper  *trips into the room*  W-what they said…

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@leumeister Yes

@leumeister I would personally vote 1, 3, 2.

@amy-l-klob I’d recommend starting by introducing your protagonist, but I would be careful about having a slow lead-in to the actual story. You want to grab the audience’s attention in the first page. That doesn’t mean you need to immediately leap into the main plot of your novel, but you should be including some conflict and/or intrigue that…[Read more]

@amy-l-klob  You’re very welcome! Yes, exactly! I love how deep it sounds, her normal life being “separated” from her. I have to agree that a good background is essential for that!

Anyway, I’m glad I could help! What is your novel about, if I may ask? (If not, that’s okay 🙂 )

@daughteroftheking  Thank you!! Good to know I’m not the only nerd here! B-)

Good point! Not a lot of people would want the “gollums goll’ming…” Or the “Daleks screaming” XD Well, I suppose the light sabers are good for that! 😛

@seekjustice  Are you still around?

@perfectfifths  Naw I’m just finishing up the scene 🙂