Ben Powell

@dekreel Yay! How far are you through it?

@dragon-snapper  Hi!! Sure! 😀

BTW I have been reading the first Sector One book. I’m enjoying it! 🙂

@dekreel I’m just about to join you (most likely), but give me just a moment. 😀

@dragon-snapper  @catwing  @aislinn-mollisong  @winter-rose  @whoever

I’m writing! I think I’m editing my DWN again…

(One thousandth post! O_o)

@rochellaine  Right. That was just a suggestion. I think maybe you should take out ONE of her dialogues since she has two. That way you’ll hint at her importance….. A little structural foreshadowing for ya! 😉

(I actually have no idea if “structural foreshadowing” is actually a thing XD )

Edit: GAAAAA! GUYS I’M AN ECCENTRIC MENTOR!! ……

@dekreel Thanks millions!  I actually am planning to have the girl an important figure in the story.  I just haven’t gotten that far yet.  Am I reading the comments right when I think you said in that case to leave in the dialogue?

@rochellaine  Wonderful, thanks! I made some comments 🙂

@clairec  Wow 🙂

I’ve done a fetal pig, a frog, an owl pellet………. and one or two other things that I can’t remember

@emily-d  You don’t like “All I Need is You?!” Why?

My two favorite songs by Hollyn are “Obvious?” and “Girl” I also really like “In Awe”

@jenwriter17

Like @audrey-caylin said, the biggest thing you can do to build your base and bring people to your blog is comment and build relationships with other bloggers. I’ve had to do that myself.

Unexpected… Actually, the main thing that I didn’t expect was how much I’ve enjoyed it. There’s not much that I haven’t liked so far. But you…[Read more]

@rochellaine I actually like the more edited version from google docs a lot better. I think the paragraph breaks helped a lot, and the entire thing seems to flow nicer when I imagine him speaking to me. The note near the end asking about if the dialogue  feels jerky, it doesn’t. I barely even noticed the switch.

@itisastarrynight That was actually why I posted this – because I’m not used to writing this style. 🙂  So I didn’t know how it would work out.

The Huckleberry Finn comment was not really about setting or actual story.  I didn’t originally intend for it to have anything to do with Huckleberry Finn.  I just wrote this as it came to me at first, wh…[Read more]

@rochellaine I’m personally not at all used to reading this style 😮
But to be honest, I found it to be a little too wordy for me? Like it didn’t really get to the point fast. Maybe thats more of a formatting issue? I’m not sure. But that might have been on purpose, I suppose. It felt it could use a little more sensual or visual information given…[Read more]

@skredder Ooh, digital art! That’s cool 🙂
do you find digital art to be  easier or harder for you?
Also, cute drawing!

@dekreel Okay, here is the google document.  You should be able to comment on it.

@sam-kowal I’m glad you like him! If you would like to point out the parts that seem too rambling to make sense, you can comment on the google document.  I would like to figure out how to do that without messing up his speech, because that’s who he is. :…[Read more]

@rochellaine AH! I love the plotline. I really want to know what happens. Like really. Write more now.

The only things I think you need to do is add some paragraph breaks–those make it easier to read. And try to use the word ‘so’ less. It’s alright to use it with this guys style, but a bit less would be better.

It’s also a bit fast-paced. If…[Read more]

@rochellaine  I like it! I love how casual the narrator sounds. Except he sounds a little too bumbly to me. It’s an interesting story, but I think I would cut out some of the “bumbling” if you know what I mean. That would make it much more interesting in my opinion. But then again, I personally favor action. What can I say? *shrug*

Anyway, I…[Read more]