Sarah Spradlin

“Buzzz . . .” Sighed Freel, as he dove from his perch on The Hive. He was being sent with the hunting party again. “Whyz won’t myz bozz promote meezz?” He thought disconsolately.

It wasn’t that hunting was so bad, but anybody, who was a bee, who was anybody, craved the job of guarding The Treasury of The Hive.

Freel landed, his feelers…[Read more]

“Buzzz . . .” Sighed Freel, as he dove from his perch on The Hive. He was being sent with the hunting party again. “Whyz won’t myz bozz promote meezz?” He thought disconsolately.

It wasn’t that hunting was so bad, but anybody, who was a bee, who was anybody, craved the job of guarding The Treasury of The Hive.

Freel landed, his feelers…[Read more]

@adry_grace

After a while I begin to laugh

Maybe cut out “after a while” here.

It’l be okay.

I think that’s supposed to be “it’ll.” 😉

Just like that her voice breaks.

I would take out “just like that.”

But the choice is yours too make

“Too make” would be “to make.” 😉

but sure enough I find her walking by my side.

I’d take out “sure e…[Read more]

Yes, that’s how I was pronouncing his name! 😉 I love coming up with names; well, I do when they come easily and I’m not spending days trying to decide if I like a certain name or not. 😉

@adry_grace
This is super! I like it a lot…however, I do echo what Hope said about Eon’s emotions needing to run deeper. I also feel like you could use Milennia’s name more instead of saying “she” all the time. That’s all I’ve got! Nice work!!! 🙂 🙂 😉

That all being said, I think this story idea sounds really interesting. 😉

Love the names, especially Eon (though I suspect I’m not saying it right in my head).

As for the scene… *rubs hands and puts on critique glasses*

I think Eon’s emotions need to run deeper. That we should see more of his thoughts and his emotion the clenching of a hand, the tightening of the chest, the rapid beat of his heart. I don’t know if…[Read more]

Aa! You changed your profile pic! You aren’t who I thought you were, @lightningmouse

I don’t blame you. This new guy isn’t the real Spiderman at all, but an imposter! 😉

Looks like I’m gonna hafta write me own superheroes . . .

Aa! You changed your profile pic! You aren’t who I thought you were, @lightningmouse

I don’t blame you. This new guy isn’t the real Spiderman at all, but an imposter! 😉

Thank you all. My next stop motion is going to have less movement I promise. It’s also going to have mouth movement. 🙂 😀 🙂
@writefury Could you find out what camera your brother used? The quality looks really good.

Ok @daeus See you tomorrow.

Wow, @bluejay! That must have taken a LOT of patience! Great job! @writefury Very nice!!!

@Daeus you won’t be. Things are not always as they seem… and even someone as simple and straightforward as Boffin can have a few tricks up their sleeve. 😉

I can’t say anymore. Finish the book.