Sarah Spradlin

The rain … it had fallen endlessly at an angle, for … how long? Had it ever begun? Would it ever end? She might be tied to a chair, in a cinderblock, windowless room, with a hairy fur carpet that smelled funny and could have been genuine Wookie, but she could still hear the rain.

The metal screech of hinges announced the arrival of a…[Read more]

The rain … it had fallen endlessly at an angle, for … how long? Had it ever begun? Would it ever end? She might be tied to a chair, in a cinderblock, windowless room, with a hairy fur carpet that smelled funny and could have been genuine Wookie, but she could still hear the rain.

The metal screech of hinges announced the arrival of a…[Read more]

The rain … it had fallen endlessly at an angle, for … how long? Had it ever begun? Would it ever end? She might be tied to a chair, in a cinderblock, windowless room, with a hairy fur carpet that smelled funny and could have been genuine Wookie, but she could still hear the rain.

The metal screech of hinges announced the arrival of a…[Read more]

@Daeus Hmm, maybe…let’s say 3:00 until 3:30? Does that work for you?

@gretald, @dbhgodreigns, and @hannah-krynicki

His main objective in writing this story seems to be to convince others of whatever points he’s trying to get across in his writing.

I agree that Orwell has some points to get across to the reader. We’ll find out what those points are pretty soon. 🙂

@Daeus I have homework to do right now, so I can’t. Will you still be writing this afternoon? I could maybe write then. 🙂

@spradlin Those are some great thoughts to chew on. 😉 I think that Orwell is telling the story for his readers, mostly. His main objective in writing this story seems to be to convince others of whatever points he’s trying to get across in his writing. It’s a little to early in the story to tell exactly what points he’s trying to prove. @Daeus…[Read more]

I like that, @anna-brie Thanks.

Legendaires it is! Thanks guys. 😉

@gretald and @hannah-krynicki
I agree that the pigs seem power-hungry and may become dictators to the other animals.

@jadamae Good point. I definitely agree with you about that. 🙂

Interesting thoughts, everyone!
As far as writing goes, I noticed that there was a lot of telling in the beginning, too, but as you said @daeus, I don’t think that it was necessarily a bad technique. As a reader, I was engaged the entire time. And that’s really all that matters, right? 😉
The characters are great. Each animal has a strikingly…[Read more]

@Hope Honestly, I like it. I don’t think it’s cheesy at all. Great idea, combining the word legionnaires and the word legend. 😉 I’d definitely go with it.

I like it, @hope! Honestly, it sounds pretty cool. 🙂

So I was laying down, hoping to rest my eyes for just two minutes, when this idea popped into my head for the name for my street team and I had to get back up and write it down.

Legendaires (a combination of the word Legend and Legionnaires)

Now, what do you think. Honest opinion, everyone. Is it cool, or is it cheesy?

How about a few tags……[Read more]

What does luxooigical even mean? 😉 I like Lightning Team…

I’ve been brainstorming words which include ‘pilgrims’, ‘warriors’, ‘soldiers’, ‘travelers’, and ‘bearers’.

One thing which struck me while reading the beginning of this story is how sound most of the animals’ reasoning seems to be. I’ve read the book, so I know how it ends, but even knowing that, the speeches and talk about overthrowing man seems reasonable and something which would be for the greater benefit of the animals. If I were there, it would…[Read more]

@Daeus
I noticed the ‘telling’ too. It was a little hard for me to get used to at first but, I agree that it did work well.
I loved the different personalities of the animals. The pigs are the confident, highly regarded animals. The horses are strong, but not necessarily the brightest. (I think Molly especially is an interesting character.) The…[Read more]

@his-instrument
There is one word to describe this. Amazing.
Okay, two words. Amazing and ingenious.
WOW! This is so good! I agree with those who said they loved Cerdic’s voice. It’s perfectly hilarious. 🙂
I only noticed a few grammar mistakes, but the awesomeness of the story made up for that! 😉
Amazing, awesome, fabulous job! (Now four words.…[Read more]