Sarah Spradlin

Very good.

@Emma-Flournoy the ‘a deep uncertainty’ is after an ‘and’ so it doesn’t really matter.

@Daeus It’s perfect. As long as web works grammatically with ‘a deep uncertainty’.

@Daeus yessss. We loves it very much. Except you made web plural. Typo.

Web! That works nicely, doesn’t it?

@Daeus @Kate-Flournoy

@Kate-Flournoy Oh, subtlety? Hmmm…

@Kate-Flournoy Oh, sublety? Hmmm…

Thanks @Daeus. ‘Preciate it. XD

Also my wifi will probably cut out before nine, so… may not actually get the results anyway. :/

WELL SOME OTHER WORD FOR WAR-ZONE! XD Web. Net. Trap. Confusion. Desolation.

Because plummets is a singular action that does not match up with the plural of tangled plots.

@Emma-Flournoy

@Daeus I’m… writing? 😛 More like sitting staring at my screen asking myself ‘wut r words’ and dabbing my nose with tissues and trying not to sneeze everywhere because I have a cold… but it makes me happy that I’m trying… sort of… I’ll try a bit harder, I guess. Just don’t expect stunning results. XD

War-zone makes it sound like a WWII story.

@Daeus Myself is most sorry. *cringe* I didn’t remember who said to change it, but maybe that doesn’t work grammatically (why doesn’t ‘plummets into tangled plots work’ though?) …so do what yourself’s brain suggests. Critics aren’t for making you do what they want, after all, but for suggesting. 😛

@Emma-Flournoy *winces* Subtlety is a virtue, my dear. And if it isn’t it should be.

And I like the font as it is. That’s one of my favorite fonts. If popular vote demands I suggest another I shall do my best, but I really don’t think the font needs to be changed.

@Daeus you poor thing. @Emma-Flournoy we are sticklers for grammatical excellence around here. *glowers*

*sighs**rubs eyes* Okay. How about this. How about we play politicians here and work out a compromise. Is there some way you could make it grammatically correct to use both plummets and tangled plots? You’d need a transition of a few words—…[Read more]

@Daeus I wasn’t thinking the font should be changed, just really toned down in color; I had meant for the design under the title when I said something more angular.
I suppose it could work the same way to change the font to something more angular…in fact that might be better ’cause I like sub-title design.
Of those fonts you linked I think…[Read more]

@Daeus That’s great. 🙂 Only thing I’d say more is maybe have a stronger verb than encounter for the ‘he encounters tangled plots…’ stuff. I see why you changed it, ’cause one can hardly plummet into bandits; but just ‘encounters’ is a little unexciting.

And actually, reading the other one again, I like it better as ‘plummets’, without the…[Read more]

@Daeus That’s great. 🙂 Only thing I’d say more is maybe have a stronger verb than encounter for the ‘he encounters tangled plots…’ stuff. I see why you changed it, ’cause one can hardly plummet into bandits; but just ‘encounters’ is a little unexciting.

@Daeus yes! I love it!

@Christi-Eaton I read it as ‘Forced to confront everything he fights for—shattered; everything he cherishes— put to the test, and a long hidden truth’ etc. The everything he fights for is shattered, and he has to confront that about it.

@dragon-snapper
I haven’t been on here lately, but thank you all the same. Merry Christmas to you, as well!

Alrighty @hannah-krynicki. I am SO sorry about the long wait again. I sincerely hope I didn’t hold up your writing process. Why don’t you send me all your questions, I’ll answer the ones I can, and send the rest to my British friends? That is, assuming you still need the questions answered. 😀 Again, I’m SO sorry about the wait.