Sarah Spradlin

I’m going to agree with @Sarah-H and @Ethryndal on the tone of the picture, but you did do an excellent job with the composition and balancing the colors. Good work also with the character’s reflection. Those are not easy! 😛

@Rachelle Fourteen book series! 😮
Nah… Les Mis probably isn’t that long. It might seem longer ’cause it’s all in one chunk; but it’s only got 1460 pages. 😛

@Ethryndal Ahem, read above line and be grateful. XD The Silmarillion’s only what, in the 300s at most?

I know though, the preface—his letter to his publisher Milton Someone-Or-Other I…[Read more]

You guys. Are. Amazing. Thank you so much!!!
@Daeus that is absolutely terrifying; I’m going to have to sleep with my stuffed leopard tonight to stave off nightmares. :’D

Mkay now, how about… candy?
You wake up in the middle of the night on Christmas Eve to unfamiliar footsteps creaking downstairs. Stumbling out of your room, you stagger down…[Read more]

@Aratrea Can a negative arc turn into a positive arc? If a character has a negative arc through the whole of the book and then, after losing everything and completely falling, could he have a brief positive arc (one that might be a chapter or two long) that brings him back to the truth and partial victory?

Wow, this is amazing Gabrielle. Hilarious. You did an excellent job with Sam’s voice. They pretty much already covered what needs covering. Thumbs up on characterization. I want the rest of this. 😉

@Winter-Rose

@winter-rose
First off, may I just say that I found this story very amusing!
For one, I agree with @ingridrd that the scene with his mom should be moved to another place. Perhaps after Sam’s tale and he comes home, the mom says “Start from the beginning”, and that would be the ending.

I’ll be there! 🙂 @aratrea

@winter-rose
WOW. I noticed a few things about this.
1. The protagonist’s voice is hilarious. Don’t change a thing about Sam’s personality.
2. I think the first scene is really good, but I’m not sure it’s necessary for the story. Everything after Sam starts telling about his day is amazing, just maybe think about putting the scene with his mom in…[Read more]

@r-j-wordsmith Really? Wow, I didn’t know that! I wonder if he was thinking like Lewis when he came up with the idea of a time-travel book to be like Narnia (of course, Tolkien never intended it to be allegorical) I like the Hobbit better too, but that’s probably because it is my favorite book. 😛

@audrey-caylin My current plan is to steal my sister’s copy of the book when I’m home over Spring break. 😉 That’s awesome that you were able to find it so clearly! Figuring out why an author chose to write a scene in a certain way is one of my favorite ways to apply and test what I’ve learned about writing.

@kate-flournoy Both of those look great! Have you thought about what the reaction sequences would look like for both of those action sequences?

@audrey-caylin That’s a fantastic question. Like @daeus said, I think a good rule of thumb is that a scene ends whenever you have a scene break or chapter break, but scenes can sometime extend over scene…[Read more]

@anna-brie Looks like a good solid base there for what looks like 2 similar but distinct character arcs on the importance of community and on how to relate between genders properly. Nice work!

@anna-brie Examples and messages are both great potential catalysts! Repetition is a great way of helping characters to change.

@anna-brie That makes a lot of sense. Sometimes (probably most of the time, now that I think about it), God’s sanctifying process is slow and gradual, so it can take some work to see how God has been changing you over the course of several years. And it certainly works differently for personalities as well! That may be something to keep in mind…[Read more]

@audrey-caylin Alright; finally getting around to giving you feedback on this. xD And yes, a “climax of a climax” is an actual thing. xD Different writers call it different things, though. Weiland calls it the ‘climactic moment.’

Anyways, onto thoughts on the story. It sounds like Method #2 that’s being utilized since the protagonist is aware of…[Read more]