Sarah Spradlin

@f5a8c3e92 I’m coming! Haven’t had time to do this yet.
But now that I’m here, I have something really helpful to say: what everyone else said. *sheepish grin* I know, that’s resounding, but there you have it. Most of what everyone else said I was thinking too, especially concerning the info-dump-ishness of the stuff about her having lived with…[Read more]

@Northerner *chains the bear up* ‘e won’t get out for some time yet. Now go forth and conquer.
(Btw, @Kate-Flournoy just almost lost that stuff, but we were able to fix it in time. After great stomachache. Otherwise…*coughcough* her computer might have suffered great damage from a certain being.)

@Christi-Eaton That’s an amazing drawing, but what I really noticed is how much the face looks like yours. Seeing it right next to your profile pic…the resemblance is striking. Other than that she’s not smiling, but if she were I think it would almost match perfectly.

@f5a8c3e92 YES. Much better. *thumbs up* Notice how the details ground you.
And I think it would be really cool for that to be part of Maya’s dream. Go for it. 😀

@jenali That’s awesome to hear that the lesson was able to help you get over that fear! I do think that explicitly-Christian fiction can be harder than writing non-explicitly Christian fiction (because you now have a second element of what it means to live as a Christian), but I think it’s definitely a challenge that can be conquered with…[Read more]

@jenali Good combo. Acceptance is a unique theme to have. What would you say the focusing question is for that theme?
The story actually sounds a bit more like Method #2 to me, since the major and minor themes are providing part of the answer to the primary theme of leadership. Unless I’m misunderstanding what you’re saying?

@jenali That sounds great! Doing foils with a theme of friendship can be especially interesting because then the two characters’ foil relationship with each other becomes an aspect of the actual theme (friendship), and the reader can see how both characters treat the same friendship differently. Good choice.

@jenali Good. I would generally agree with you that writers who struggle with theme don’t often have more than one theme. I like the way that your two examples parallel each other (one being the third method done well; one the third method done poorly). Contrasting similar situations of stories that work and stories that don’t work can be a great…[Read more]

@ethryndal Liriel’s guilt in the reaction to scene #1 is unclear to me. If she didn’t care about his life in battle, why after battle does she begin to care? Are there any events that happen between those that send her on that path? Or is it the realization that he could be dead that makes her re-think her decision?

Scene #2 looks good to me.…[Read more]

@ethrynal Haha, got it. As long as you’re clear on what those events are, that should be good. 🙂

@Christi-Eaton thanks. 😉

Welcome to the site, @moriahs! Glad you found us. Who are your favorite authors?

Welcome to the site, @morahs! Glad you found us. What do you like to write?

@f5a8c3e92 I like this.
*switches into professional mode* Your prose is stronger than a lot I’ve seen, and you show a lot of promise with dialogue and characterization. Your sense of flow and pacing does seem to be a bit off— the prologue was too short and vague, for one. It didn’t connect me to the story, which is what a prologue is for. I…[Read more]

@Christi-Eaton *squeals* Still love it!

… can I post mine again here for comparison? It’ll make it look awful but I want to see the similarities. Thanks. 😀
*doesn’t wait for permission*

@Mark-Kamibaya YES. Rogue One. Everyone. Watch it. The more I think about it, the more sure I may be becoming that it’s my favorite movie ever. Seriously. Everything about it was so well done, and the theme—!
*buries face in hands* Just… watch it. You’ll see what I mean.

@f5a8c3e92 I don’t think I ever cried so much at an episode.

@that_writer_girl_99 Oh, yes. That one. The poor Doctor… It was so sad. Because you think it’s over and they’re safe and then… *sniffs*

Ok, enough emotions for tonight. And I just finished Rogue One again too… I’m off to bed. See you all! 😀

@f5a8c3e92 Talking about emotions and Doctor Who, remember the one where there was two Amys? My sister and I… that was the worst one ever. INTJ or not, I just… I couldn’t. It was so sad. *weeps at the memory*

@that_writer_girl_99 What, Sherlock?!?!?

@f5a8c3e92 Not sure… I like Martha. I liked Clara on and off. Amy and Rory were probably my favorites when they were together.