Brianne

@savannah_grace2009

I think I’ll let you find out what happens 🙃

@freedomwriter76

OH MY GOSH CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!! I am so happy for you! You’ll have to tell me the name when you actually print it so I can read it, haha!

One of my goals is to publish my first book before I turn 16/before I graduate. (I’m really young for my grade, so I’ll be 16 my senior year and then in september I’ll turn 17 then graduate…[Read more]

@grcr

No clue 🤣

savannah_grace2009

@freedomwriter76

That so exciting!!! Good job!!!!!🎉 👏 🎉 💗

@trailblazer

Also, I have to know…is Libbie ever going to fall for Albert? It’s okay if you can’t say because of spoilers but I just wanted to know, haha.

@trailblazer

Got it! I’d just never heard it before, but it makes sense.

@savannah_grace2009 haha I think that paragraph mistake happened when I was copying and pasting over from my document lol.

“At long last” is an expression (it’s like “at last”, but implies more of a “finally, after all that struggle”) but it felt a little weird to me too when I was reading it again so I’ll probably change that.

@jonas

Hmmm, that’s hard, because you can tell it’s a bit derivative from a lot of preexisting ideas. To change that would be to radically change the system as a whole, which is fine, just annoying, but often necessary.

One issue I immediately have is with the name and the first element. If it is called “essence burning” does that not show an…[Read more]

@sarafini

One thing I noticed was that it was really hard to tell that it was a dream. If you weren’t looking close enough, you would have missed it. So since it’s a dream, you might want to make it more obvious. But I liked your story! It was good!

@thearcaneaxiom

I like your idea of that the magic words are evil because of the purpose given by the Pythonos. So I might use that? I’m still not sure, haha!

Names of people:

Ottoline, Marcurious, Sparrow, Rishona, Berko, Sef, Lilitu, Azazel, Indie, Jordan (I need a new name for him, an evil one, so if you could help that would be great!),…[Read more]

@trailblazer

“I’ll just be thankful when I can sleep in a bed again and have a roof over my head,” Etta whispered back. I mentally chided myself for longing for something so vain when even the most

practical needs still weren’t met. Etta had a wisdom I lacked. What did it matter if we were a little dirty and dusty? No one else in our party m…

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@esther-c

I’m so excited, lol!

@freedomwriter76

YESs that’s AWESOME girl!!! I can’t wait to see it published someday… and of course read it XD

@trailblazer

Looks good! Didn’t really notice anything to fix.

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @freedomwriter76

If nobody does it before me, I’ll write the first RP either tomorrow or Friday. 🙂 (tomorrow’s gonna be busy, so I may not get to it. 😉 )

@freedomwriter76

Woo-hoo!!!! Congratulations!!!!! 💖🥳

@freedomwriter76

Girl!!! that’s amazing!!!!!!!!

congratulations!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Even though she’s beautiful she thinks that she’s ugly because that’s what she’s been told all her life.

If she ever says something self-derogatory in front of Amir, he’s going to be so shocked. 😂 And seeing her sort of red hair is going to surprise him (and @mineralizedwritings Kaine’s hair) since in his country red hair is…[Read more]

@grcr

Who wants to start? I’ve never done this before, so anyone more experienced want to start?

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore

Here’s another segment! Not sure if I got all the historical details correct, so let me know if something seems out of place or unrealistic.

August 1883: Settling Down

After two months of travel, we were in Iowa. Three weeks after that, we arrived in Omaha, Nebraska. Here we stayed for about a week, resting from…[Read more]