Brianne

@savannah_grace2009

This is some of my writing I want to burn, bury the remnants in a dark cave, then collapse the cave to never see the light of day again, but here it is for you to enjoy…

“Mailes?… Do you think me a good Jan?” Laijas asked. Surprise stunned Mailes, what kind of question was that? It didn’t sound like something Laijas would…

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@rae

oh my gosh….lol I was reading it and I was like, oh it’s really good! and then I read this sentence:

I can’t tell you what Nahim’s face looked like because he never showed it to anyone.

And then I laughed.

sorry if that sounds mean…..

And now for the worst thing I have ever written:

“It worked!” Jorryn cries.…

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I shall keep the spelling for effect…

Chapter 1 Nahim and Mandin

Nahim sat cofortably near Mandin liking out over the lake Gaylax. He was young, only being 19 years in age, Mandin was 5 years older and had more expierance but they still got along together well. I can’t tell you what Nahim’s face looked like because he never showed it to anyone.…

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@savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else

Ready for some pieces of writing from when I had absolutely no idea what I was doing?

@whalekeeper

Okay, I think Chase’s stutter may return…

@trailblazer

idk….two teeth on the bottom in the back. (not wisdom teeth)

I have teeth that are baby teeth, but there aren’t any adult teeth to replace them, so I was just gonna have baby teeth forever. But the dentist thought they were just gonna break apart someday so he pulled them….

@savannah_grace2009

Which teeth did you have to get pulled?

@trailblazer

Oh no!! That sounds horrible!!!

4 hours later and I can actually feel my face and talk and eat food!!! YAY!

@jonas

okay! 🙂

I have a headache thanks to my little brother, ask me another day, but rn…all I can think about is dragons and the philological warfare of sirens…

@savannah_grace2009

I CAN’T FEEL MY FACCCCCCCEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i just got two teeth pulled…..AHHHHHHH!

Oof I hate that! When I had my wisdom teeth removed my whole face was numb, and then I could barely open my mouth because apparently they cut through the muscles. It took like two weeks of slo…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Okay, I’ll think about it! No problem, thank you!

@hybridlore

Yeah, that totally makes sense! And you’re welcome, I really enjoyed reading it!!

For buildup, I’m not quite sure. Maybe Mason has a big decision to make, and something about the king helps him make that decision? Or maybe to keep it more line with what you have so far, something big rests on the identity of the king?? I’d have to…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

So, yep! Mostly just because of the curfew. I guess I was trying to show how the villagers were impacted by it, if that makes sense.
That’s true, I might use that word a lot XD. I’ll have to reread it and see where I can change words around to fix that. Thanks for pointing that out!
Yeah, I get that. I’m not really sure how the…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Okay, I’m finally here!! XD

So, I was digging pretty hard to find something to critique, so I’ll do my best…

“A hint of fear is smothered in the master’s gruff tone.” – why the fear?? Just because of the curfew?

I agree that it was pretty obvious the man was going to be the king.

In first person it’s really easy to use “is” a lo…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Okay I love it and hate it at the same time!!!!

Also maybe you could write Clint struggling to be in his old house cause of memories of his mom and his dad

😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

@freedomwriter76

*trying to hide all the spelling errors* I’m not sure why I can’t type on phone but I can’t lol

Yeahhh… I’m just a ray or sunshine today XD

Pietro!!!! Remember bow much Godly loved Perer, well Pietro and Wanda are mine (I feel like they’ve been mine for a while but still) if you hurt them you will have to speak to…[Read more]

Also uhhh I recently found the saddest parallel in the MCU

In age of ultron at Pietro’s death you can see relief on Clint’s face when he realizes him nor the kid were hurt but then he sees Pietro and his relief fades

And in endgame everyone’s so excited that they got the stones but then they realize Natasha didn’t come back

And finally when T…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Clint!!! He’s such a good friend!!!

Endgame makes me sob, Clint’s reaction is… 😭

Yesss Maria would be the best one to find her

Also an idea for Pietro is for him to like so many of them struggle with ptsd cause most people assume that Pietro struggled with that from.the bombing

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