Brianne

@whalekeeper

One of my friends compared I think Nahim to someone from Star Wars or something, but idr.

Other than that, i don’t think anyone’s even known enough about my characters to compare them to others. Recently, I only really talk about characters on here or with Andrew. Mainly cuz my friends don’t really follow when I start ranting XD.

@keilah-h

-Me being chronically inactive cause I’m about to serve a mission

-Someone mentions Avatar

-Me, breaks through the ceiling falling before you

I am here

I’m iffy on the show itself. I don’t need another fixation. There are a couple issues I’d like to avoid with the mythology of it all.

Always fair, however, I will say that you are s…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

@ellette-giselle

*randomly pops in*

Maybe having Leon point that out would help readers realize it more?

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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@elishavet-pidyon

wowww…that’s a lot to think about and really helpful!!! Thank you!

Here’s a little background on that scene…

yes, I know it is very sloppy and not perfect (I just wrote it literally today)

but here’s the cliffnotes:

• Sef is a slave of Iver, who is a Pythonos.
• Sef and Iver are currently in the throne room of the Master, leader of all Pythonos
• Iver has applied for a military position, and the Master is…

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@the_lost-journal

WHATTT
the chosen makes me wanna cry

it’s so good!!!! they portrayed it so well in my opinion hahaha

it’s my FAVORITE show of all time hahaha

@elishavet-pidyon

YES those are what I’m looking for!!!!
I will definitely be using those later in my book…

But I’m struggling with a specific scene where I need a lie XDXD and none of these seem to fit…

“Well, what are you waiting for?” the Master spat, motioning for Iver to continue. “You may begin whenever you are ready.”

Sef’s knees sho…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay good lol

Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.

@esther-c

Okay perfect! Thank you!

@the_lost-journal

Aw I’m glad <3

Some of those were lies. what do you mean? You yourself said that they were lies.

yes, they are lies…

But they’re not the type of lies in my story…

agh I don’t know how to explain it, I’m sorry!!

@the_lost-journal

omc…you’re gonna make me cry…that’s so sad! I’m so sorry that people said that to you…I hope you know it’s not true and that NO ONE should EVER talk that way to another person! That makes me really mad actually, like why do people have to be so mean?!?

so I have experience with a lot of insults!

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@trailblazer

It needs to be lies that affect the way you think…but shorter. Like “you are nothing” will have more impact than “you are ugly/not beautiful” will…

I’m not really sure how to explain it, but I’m looking for short lies, not so much longer insults.

@savannah_grace2009

Can it be any lies or does it have to be something that has to do specifically with Pythonos? I’m not familiar enough with your stories to help if they have to be specific, but I might be able to give a few suggestions otherwise.

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t started it yet, but I will have read all of it by the end of February. Once I read it all, I’ll give you my overall impression and thoughts! :))

@linus-smallprint

Yes, but she didn’t become a Pythonos.

The Pythonos were going to take her mani for slavery and imprisonment.

Sef took her place as a slave.

@jonas

Don’t worry about it! That’s okay!

@linus-smallprint

Oh that’s okay!!!

Sef turns herself into the Pythonos

Wait, hold up…

Sef doesn’t turn into the Pythonos…she is enslaved by the Pythonos. I thought I made that clearer but if not can you give me suggestions to help with that? I don’t want to confuse anyone XD

@anyone

Also….

HELPPPP

I am in need of some ideas.

I need some lies that my characters could believe about themselves, like “you are worthless” or “you are nothing” that would give the Pythonos power.

I don’t know what to doooooo ahh

@grcr

AHHH that’s such a cool idea! I’ve never thought of that before!