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@jonas

So I guess that chapter by itself doesn’t seem necessary, but the Pythonos is going to kidnap her and Jyron and use them as hostages so that their father will provide military forces and supplies to start a war against the Paynes.

Does that make sense?

@jonas

 I did mention a possible explanation for why the prisoners might call it that, although I’m not sure it would account for why the Pythonos do.

There are other “units”, this is just the main one and the most important one.

Okay though, that would be hilarious if that actually happened, if Marcurious asked Jraldath why it’s called the UN…[Read more]

I know it’s a little rough, but it’s my first draft so definitely far from perfect, lol

@jonas

Here’s a little snippet from the next chapter from Liv’s POV:

Chapter 17

“I’ll race you to the brook,” Jyran smiled crookedly over his shoulder, barely giving Livia a chance to agree before giving his mount Irwin a gentle squeeze with his calves and galloping away in a cloud of dirt.

Liv tucked a strand of her azure hair behind her ear,…

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@jonas

Okay, I’ll work on the idea about the horses.

EXU…I kind of like that. We’ll see though. Imagine if I did do EU…and someone from Europe read that, they’d be like “Europe’s not like that at all!” jk.

@jonas

I might just keep it the UNIT, then.

You keep asking, though, why it is the “unit” and how is it the definition of the word. I tend to be lazy and not overthink it. Correct me if I’m wrong but does it really matter why it’s called that? If so, why does it matter? (sorry if I sound like a brat rn, I’m just kind of confused.) It is just a…[Read more]

@jonas

Sorry. Brain fart. I meant EU. (Why did I put P?) But then that reminds me of the abbreviation for Europe. So idk.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

So in my WIP, Liv has a horse named Xandro. I was thinking that all the races have horses that are intelligent and match the “color scheme” and have the same powers. For example: Liv in an Aquino, she has blue hair, eyes, skin, clothes, and has the power to manipulate water. Xandro has a blue coat, eyes, hooves, mane and…[Read more]

@esther-c

Yeah, ofc!

@jonas

In that case, maybe the prison could be split into several units and you could call this one the ‘Experimental Unit’

Okay, I like that. Maybe I could call it the EP instead of the UNIT for short? (I know, so creative…not.)

@jonas

I love conviction! And oh my gosh, Flaz would drive Ellis insane, this is going to be hilarious!

@jonas

Yeah, that’s happened to me too before!

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! Thing is my favorite, lol. I don’t think you should change the name even though it’s a little mean, but it’s up to you. I think it fits her and she likes it, so it works.

The plot is a little confusing to me… a lot of the philosophy/science stuff goes over my head but that’s fine, lol. Anyway, nice job so far! I…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@jonas

Oh yeah that’s happened to me before. Idk why. 🤷🏻‍♀️ If I have to edit a post, I’ll just edit it, copy it, then submit the edit just in case it deletes.

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, thanks!!

Plotting isn’t always easy for me, so that’s encouraging to hear. 😊

I’ll try to get to writing a RP later today, but I’m not sure if that will happen. 😅 I haven’t gotten to it this week because life has been pretty busy. 🙃

@rae

I like the one with the girl face silhouette!!

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr  @esther-c @jonas @rae @trailblazer

Kaine leans against the old wooden window sill. Steady rain patters the outside of the glass, obscuring the faint glow of starlight. He stares at the three moons hanging in the sky, creating a light reflection in the collecting puddles. Kaine presses his face onto the…[Read more]