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@savannah_grace2009

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

You do whatever you want, girl, it’s your story. XD

I had actually never heard that before, but it kind of makes sense. I think some writers also use prologues for info-dumping. I’d rather have…[Read more]

@esther-c

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

you’re good!!! You can just read it over on these links. I posted earlier in this thread, or I can send you the Google docs link so you can comment and edit. I can’t send the docs link now because I’m…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

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@savannah_grace2009

Ok so in this RP I say Liv has blue eyes, but correct me if I’m wrong. 😂

Lukas

Lukas found he couldn’t take his eyes off Liv’s face. He tried, but somehow, he found himself drowning in the crystalline pool of her blue eyes.

“Aww.” He heard a whisper pass by him. He blinked and looked behind him, only to see Fynn dance awa…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

First of all, I love your writing!!

Second, my actual answer to your question. XD Ok. So I think I prefer the first one better. Though I do have an opinion on prologues… I heard an author (who had been writing since forever) say that he doesn’t like prologues because typically writers use them as a way to draw readers in bef…[Read more]

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@savannah_grace2009

Of course! Sorry, I think my last post lagged. I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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@savannah_grace2009

it’s all true though…I became such a better writer when I joined KP and after talking to all of you guys!!

I did to! I dont think I would have ever got this is close to finishing without everyone on here <3

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I did notice that! Maybe Lilitu’s chapter could come after Sef’s?

@sara

Definitely! I hope you figure it out!

Ok, I read them both. The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning chapter. That’s all I have for now, I will go over it more later today if I have time!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

This is supposed to say “feel free to tag me in any post”…so yeah…XD

Dont worry, I understood XD I make errors like that all the time 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement is so sweet 🥰

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@savannah_grace2009

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel. I will defiantly look through your link and give my critique 🙂 And pretty soon I will be posting some of mine to get feedback, I’ll be sure to tag you 🙂

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]