Silverclaw Bonnetfolly

Hey guys! So I’m going to reuse an OLD thread and post my updated story snippet for you guys to critique. To make it clear, this is my Doctor Who fan novella. You don’t have to be a Whovian to read it. I’m excited about it because I recently started changing it to first person instead of third. Here is what I have so far!

@theacornman  @pickupyour…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper  Mmmmmmm, pizza.

My pleasure! Catch you later!

@dragon-snapper  Right, I feel you

You can do it!

@dragon-snapper  Still? Awwww

What are you working on right now?

@dragon-snapper  Heheh, I would have LOVED the view from the windows though!

Any progress in LOKD3?

@dragon-snapper  I think I just finished installment five. Or four. Ike had just met Kaydon and is now in his boring apartment

@dragon-snapper  Hi!! Sure! 😀

BTW I have been reading the first Sector One book. I’m enjoying it! 🙂

@dragon-snapper  @catwing  @aislinn-mollisong  @winter-rose  @whoever

I’m writing! I think I’m editing my DWN again…

(One thousandth post! O_o)

@rochellaine  Right. That was just a suggestion. I think maybe you should take out ONE of her dialogues since she has two. That way you’ll hint at her importance….. A little structural foreshadowing for ya! 😉

(I actually have no idea if “structural foreshadowing” is actually a thing XD )

Edit: GAAAAA! GUYS I’M AN ECCENTRIC MENTOR!! ……

@rochellaine  Wonderful, thanks! I made some comments 🙂

@clairec  Wow 🙂

I’ve done a fetal pig, a frog, an owl pellet………. and one or two other things that I can’t remember

@emily-d  You don’t like “All I Need is You?!” Why?

My two favorite songs by Hollyn are “Obvious?” and “Girl” I also really like “In Awe”

@rochellaine  I like it! I love how casual the narrator sounds. Except he sounds a little too bumbly to me. It’s an interesting story, but I think I would cut out some of the “bumbling” if you know what I mean. That would make it much more interesting in my opinion. But then again, I personally favor action. What can I say? *shrug*

Anyway, I…[Read more]

@clairec  Hehe, do you like biology? I think it’s cool! What have you dissected?

@waterlily  Haha, that’s perfect! I might use that… Ohh, unless you’re already using it, which is fine XD

@clairec  She said she did it when she was eight or something, so I doubt it

*looks at fish brain picture*  Eww…..  Cooooooooooll

(I like biology XP )

@rochellaine  Oh, that’s funny!! Good signature choice! 😉