Sara

Okay, after reading this through again, I don’t think I’m the best person to give you critiques on this book.

You see, I’m really experienced in fantasy and sci fi (and half the time I don’t even know what I’m doing XD)

And a book like yours isn’t something that I’d probably pick up on my own.

In no way is this because of the book itself…it’s…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

He was frustrated as anyone would be in the circumstances…… Turin is the one with the wicked temper around here. You can be someone who is naturally very easy going, but who does lose their temper in a certain situation, or at least gets frustrated

Ohhh okay 👍

I think I’d just like to see more of Aaron’s  flaws whether or not…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay…I’m so sorry…I’m not the best at critiqueing 😣😭😭😭😭Actually I’m horrible at it but oh well

OK, in the begining I said that Aaron was 18!! Turin was a year or two older Sabina was 16! Does that fix it???

Well…you should be able to tell a character’s age based on how they act, without the author saying that. Since both…[Read more]

Here’s Sef’s playlist

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Guys…

I just made a playlist for Lilitu…

Apparently Lilitu loves rock songs…

WHAT HAVE I DONE?!?!

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Niceeee!

@keilah-h

Thanks!!!

Wowwww you’re so good at drawing 😍 I love your worldbuilding too!!!

@lightoverdarkness6

Oof yess, I’ve done that before too 😅 But girlie if you ever feel the need to step away for a few weeks or however long you need, don’t be afraid to do that! We’re always here for you but we understand that we all have lives outside of KP and sometimes taking a small break can be super beneficial 🫶 And if not, that’s great t…

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@keilah-h

Thank youuuu! That makes me feel a lot better about my worldbuilding because I feel like I suck at it XD

Let me just info dump about the trees (don’t read this if you don’t want to, it’s a lot)

So in my story the trees are intelligent, thinking beings, and are often used as Messengers of the Great One (God). So since Azazel killed the…[Read more]

@rae

omc I am sooo sorry! I just haven’t been in an RPing mood and keep forgetting about this or procrastinating XD

Not that I don’t love RP’ing… I love it with everything in me! It’s just sometimes I’m not in the mood or in the mood for other things more. Does that make sense? Not that that’s an excuse…sorry I feel bad 😕

@calyhuge

yep we…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Wow!!! That makes me so happy you read through that whole thing! because even i probably wouldn’t have that long of an attention span XD XD

I forgot to mention Erstonians.

Erstonia is a country that’s across the ocean from Andromeda.

The people who live there are diverse in appearances. There’s no rule for skin, hair, eyes, etc. Some…[Read more]

@lightoverdarkness6

OH MY GOODNESS LIGHT!!!!!!!!!

You’re fine!!!! I was starting to worry about you XDXD

Yes my life’s been busy too! but instead of actually taking a break from KP and writing…I distract myself with being busy with KP XD not the healthiest thing to do but oh well lol

Oof sounds fun but I bet you are soooo tired! I always…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint @keilah-h

Here is a list of the races in my book. Note that each race listed appears human except for the color of their skin, hair, eyes, and blood, and their powers of course.

Azer: Azers are pyrokinetics and can create and manipulate fire with their mind. It isn’t just the cliche “can shoot fire from their hands and from…[Read more]

I have a few thoughts.

“Sabina,” called Turin. “Come down, we have to go.”

Sabina deliberately turned away.

“Sabina come,” commanded Turin, firmly.

She did not move.

Turin’s eyes narrowed. “Why you little–– Sabina! You get down here right this instant! Get down or I’ll––”

This scene felt a little off. He went from being minorly annoyed to th…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I wouldn’t have minded….. except I have a thing for young guys having facial hair. They can’t really do it well, and I don’t like it. At all.

Oh. Then you better not come to my highschool or the schools in my area..there’s like 15 year olds with beards and moustaches and sideburns. #scarred-for-life

@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint

YUCK!!! You sir, do not pay attention to descriptions!!!! A full beard! UGH! No! He’s nineteen or twenty!

Ummm …I seriously thought that he’d have a beard and be in his twenties/thirties!

And I thought Aaron was even older!

I mean, I still consider late twenties/early thirties to be a young man…so you m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Sabina has brown hair, her brother has black. She is only 16 at this point.

WHAT?!?!

I thought she had dark hair, eyes, and tan skin! And I thought she was at LEAST 22!!!!!!!!!!!