Sam Kowal

@valtmy @rochellaine @ariel-ashira @seekjustice @dekreel @alia @catwing

I’ll be on for a bit, if anyone would like to join me. 🙂

@seekjustice I’m back!

I read your prologue, then read through the discussion you and @valtmy have been having.  I like your conclusions.  I only have two things to add. (that I’ve thought of so far… 😉 )

#1: If they changed their names, Chessy shouldn’t even know her father Jean’s real name as a teenager, should she?  He has changed her na…[Read more]

@valtmy

I think that would be a very fitting career path for you. I’d certainly hire you anyway. 😀

I’m still waiting for P3, but since you assure me that it’s coming along, I shall be obediently patient 🙂

@valtmy

Honestly, all our discussions together are really helpful for my book, even if they do sometimes cause me to despair 😛

@valtmy

Okay, that seems like a pretty easy fix and it makes a lot more sense. I’ll work that in 😀

@jenwriter17

I’m not sure that I will be, since it will be Sunday, but I might have time to chat in the afternoon.

@seekjustice @valtmy @dekreel

Lovin’ all the SFI talk going around, but I sadly cannot join you at the moment. 🙁 I might be on tomorrow, if any of you think you’ll be too.

@valtmy

Another possible I just had was one I saw in a show once, where people registered children who had never been born and then grew them up over the years, and sold the identities to anyone who would pay for them. That could be a very profitable business in a dystopian world.

Yes, I could possibly tweak the order of events. Or else, Jean…[Read more]

@valtmy

*cue despair*

Well, the only thing I can think of now is that he fakes his own death and goes to live in a convent.

@valtmy

I know, it’s not entirely perfect yet 😛

Concerning #4, I hadn’t even thought of the woman being arrested, but you’re right. She would be, 😛 I’ll have to fix that up.

#5 My idea was that he had her name “legally” changed to Chessy.

#6 And this is where I run into problems. Its all very well for Jean to change his name and hide so well…[Read more]

@seekjustice I’ll have to read it later tonight.  I’ve got to go now for a while I think. 🙁

@dekreel

No, I completely understand. Life has been mad for me too.

And yeah, we were talking about SFI. 🙂

@seekjustice  Which one?

Oh, and sorry I never came back to beta-reading SFI. I lost the notes page you emailed me and then life happened annnnd. . . yeah. So sorry. 😛 🙁

@rochellaine

Ah, so she does actually say she likes Kendall? Hmm…I didn’t know that

*wonders off to ponder for a while*

@valtmy @rochellaine

I do that everytime. I even went and copied the link, just never pasted it.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1T-tYVuU9CwMBJJgt4MIpkXj9fScSA3Z06DttCofZShk/edit?usp=sharing

@dekreel Hey! We’re just discussing my New York Times Bestseller WIP.

@valtmy  Sounds tedious. 😛

I’m doing more fan stuff. As usual.

@seekjustice It took a while, but I found it! 😛  You said you had no idea where the pairing between Rain and Kendall came from?  Here’s the quote from your first draft:

I felt myself drifting off to sleep, the grass prickling my neck and tickling my ear. Then I smiled. “Hey, Rain, you’ve got a thing for Kendall, don’t you?”…

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@valtmy

Well, it definitely doesn’t follow the conventions of a romance novel, but there is a lot of romance…

I think I’ve fixed the dystopian problem actually. Hopefully. I’ve read a lot about the expected conventions, and been working on worldbuilding, and it actually fits a lot more snugly into those expectations than I would immediately…[Read more]

@rochellaine  @valtmy  @seekjustice  @alia  @ariel-ashira  @jenwriter17  @anyone

I think I’ll try to hack away this plot hole a bit. How are y’all doing? 🙂

@rochellaine @valtmy

Here’s the rough draft I wrote the other day (really late at night 😛 ). It’s in omniscient pov, since that’s how most prologues seem to be done, but i’m still to decide whether the abrupt switch of focus at the end works? Let me know what you think 😀