Ruth

@rae

ah, now it’s all coming back to me. Yeah, give him a will to live and the original ending fits really well. Otherwise it’s juts a little flat, which is why I remembered it the way I expected it to go when I read it the first time. No yeah, It’s coming back now.

@rae

Lucille
Lucy thought about it. She swung off the bed and began rearranging the quilts and coverlet. “I’m awake now.”

@rae

That’s what we’re here for!

I’m sorry, that sounds rough. I’ll keep praying for you ❤️ Ellette’s idea is a good one, but I don’t know if it’ll work for sure. Maybe you could have a reminder on your phone or something that tells you to eat a snack? Just getting into the routine of eating three meals a day even if you’re not hungry  could h…

@keilah-h

In a book like this one it would be up at the top for me. It makes the end fall flat. *shrug*

@ellette-giselle lol it’s not like I’ve ever done that in books so I’m not offended. I’ve just seen it happen.

tbh it is aggravating but it’s not as annoying as some other stuff people do in books so it’s pretty low on my list of Things I Hate In Books.

@rae

hey, dump away.

Well that’s good! (forgive me if you already mentioned it and I forgot, but do they know yet what the condition is that is being treated, or is this more of testing out theories?)

Well, friends of mine who have eating problems I always take them on a run or something or to go do some hard work. Nothing like exercise…[Read more]

@rae

Honestly, I don’t remember my initial reaction, you would have to look back at the comments. XD But actually, in my memory (until you just recapped it) he was going to turn himself in and then they were attacked and he was killed protecting Jenna (?) and her family. I like that ending because Baron gave his life for someone instead of taking…[Read more]

I think it’s okay. Like Whaley said, it makes sense that the end of his arc is him turning himself in, because he knows that’s the right thing to do.

When I read it, I might not LIKE it (I don’t remember what my reaction to it was when I was beta reading) but the more I think about it the more I’ll understand why, and that in and of itself…[Read more]

@rae

Lucille

“I saw a man.” She spoke quieter than she intended, but struggled to turn up her voice’s volume. “He didn’t have a mouth, Gabriel, and now he’s gone. So how are you hearin’ him?”

Gabriel: *Hears voices*

Lucy: *Wacky nightmares*

Mel: *Sleeps with ducks*

@rae

Keep drawing while you can!

Yes she does

Lucille

Lucy pointed at the empty place. Then, confused, she put her hand down.  “I – I’ve got a… Are you hearing him?”

@rae

It depends on what a “slap on the face” is. I think a slap on the face is a betrayal of the reader, or unfairly maximizing/minimizing something to manipulate reader emotion, or wasting the reader’s time.

This would be a betrayal if the arc was about survival or hinged on Baron’s survival. But his arc seems entirely spiritual. He’s concluded…[Read more]

@rae

Funnily enough, I fell asleep XD.

Good!

My work is done, I got my Negative argument all formulated, now it’s just doing it tomorrow without a panic attack.

Is this Lincoln-Douglas or policy?

Now that that’s done, I’m chilling and redrawing Baron artwork.

Jealous. I’m in an art slump. Not happy with anything I draw, which might mean I’m on…[Read more]

@rae

Lucille

The headless man lifted a hand. His fingers trembled feebly as he held them up to his neck, as if trying to see them. He jerked back as he realized his eyes were gone.

“Lucy, it’s okay.”

Lucy snapped free of paralysis. The figure’s ashy skin peeled away, like petals wrinkling into brown dust, and he vanished from the foot of her b…[Read more]

@rae

I really should have replied earlier, I’m sorry.

You’re fine! I was not up last night and I’m replying rather late now; it’s not a big deal for you to do the same.

How is your work going? I think I had the same debate topic once, not sure. I’m sorry it’s not a pleasant task for you. Also girl, late night roleplaying is fun but you need to…[Read more]

Also, just so you guys know, I will be out of town for the next four days and won’t be able to reply to whatever you post until afterward.

@rae oh that stinks, I had a speech and debate class that did like mock trials sometimes and I hated it. (they never rigged it, I just didn’t like how it worked)

my characters are currently heading your direction btw.

@mineralizedwritings

oh me goodness that looks so gooooooood…!!

😍😍😍

@loopylin haha they can be sometimes

also thanks, it was my first time and I tried really hard to capture his energy hehe