PrincessFoo

@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

@xonos-darkgrate Sure thing!

One word: Stilts.

@leumeister *appears in a puff of smoke* I vote Celeste, Raphael, and Kenneth. *disappears once more*

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀

@epicaddie2 Continuing to pray! <3

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

@leumeister I like Camille, Raphael, and Tristan. Tristan is one of my favorite names!

@amy-l-klob  You’re very welcome! Yes, exactly! I love how deep it sounds, her normal life being “separated” from her. I have to agree that a good background is essential for that!

Anyway, I’m glad I could help! What is your novel about, if I may ask? (If not, that’s okay 🙂 )

@daughteroftheking  Thank you!! Good to know I’m not the only nerd here! B-)

Good point! Not a lot of people would want the “gollums goll’ming…” Or the “Daleks screaming” XD Well, I suppose the light sabers are good for that! 😛

@dekreel THIS. THIS IS THE BESTIEST. *promptly geeks out*

The tribbles… *snickers*

I don’t think I want 11 gollums goll’ming. 😛 I’ll take the light sabers, though.

@princessfoo Get over here, fellow geek. 😀

@dekreel *cracks knuckles* Fun thread idea. Let’s see… *searches memory* Well, I dearly loved My Father’s Dragon. My fascination with dragons started at a young age, you see. I also really liked the first Boxcar Children book, The Family Under the Bridge (A children’s book about the Great Depression. Now, there’s a thought.), The Cricket in…[Read more]

@catwing Hey, I missed you around here! *cheerily toasts with cup of orange juice*

@seekjustice  Are you still around?

@perfectfifths  Naw I’m just finishing up the scene 🙂

@catwing Good night!

Greetings, @amy-l-klob!!

How to begin a novel. *scratches chin* Hmmmmmm…

It makes sense why you want to do that! The reader does need to know the background of the protagonist.

I think you should kick off the first chapter like right before the action happens, around the time when the conflict comes in. Like, the protagonist is coming home…[Read more]