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@ellette-giselle

The last scene was sooo cute, I liked it a lot! Also Julius’ internal dialogue and conflict was good. Ignatius, if you lay a finger on Marcus, it’s not ending well for you!

One thing that I think you could add is more description of the places though, such as when Julius and Ignatius are talking.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, and I feel you on that, I have way too many side characters that I have yet to develop lol.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, a few critiques on chapter 7. I think you could show Flavia and Marcus’ relationship a bit more since we haven’t seen a lot of her.

Marcus could probably be shown to be more upset after talking with Julius, since that was his best friend.

Otherwise it was good, the ending of the chapter made me smile.

@rae

Sorry to hear about that, and I’ll pray for her. Also I second Ellette on that notion, chocolate or sugar will probably help.

@ellette-giselle

I finished the chapter, and THAT’S SO CUTE!! Marcus totally deserves that happiness!!! I do have a few critiques, so is it okay if I could give you them on your WIP topic?

@ellette-giselle

Yay, I’m glad!! And so far, the 7th chapter is great!!

@ellette-giselle

Aaa! I’m reading it right now, I’m so excited!!

@ellette-giselle

Poor Marcus XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay! That’s really considerate of you, thanks! Is editing going well?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, should I not?

My bad, I might have made it sound like that was a negative thing. I’m glad your working on it, I like it a lot! In fact, that was why I was asking, to see if you were going to post a new chapter soon or something. Sorry if that came off as rude.

@rae

I’m glad it’s going well for you, and I wish I had pulled myself out of bed at 4:00 but unfortunately was unable to (sorry!). Keep going, you got this!!

@ellette-giselle

Are you working on the Roman book perchance? 🙂

@whalekeeper
Lois

The slightest bit of color grew in Lois’ pale cheeks. He adjusted his glasses, resisting the urge to look at Felicity again. He blinked a few times at Marcel.

“I, uh,” He cleared his throat.“I thought you hated playing cupid.”

@rae

I will join you, but will only be able to write until 3:00 since I have work at 3:30. We’ll see how this goes!

@rae

Aww that’s so sad 😭

WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME

@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that.

Your welcome!

Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

That’s the worst, I can definitely relate to that XD

@rae

That looks really good! Great job!!

Also I would be interested in hearing it too.

@rae

I’m in, this sounds great!

@loopylin

I ADORE the Arcadian Wild, have you listened to their other songs?

@rae

I love it, it looks so good!

I’d like to hear it.

Sorry for my never-ending questions…just trying to get some context before I share my thoughts XD XD