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@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

Even you were wrong, but believed you were right, I still think it would be good to disagree with the other person.

All of what I said still depends on the situation and the intentions of the people involved, though.

@stephie

Yes. There are some social situations where it would be inappropriate or pointless to start a fight with someone like that, but if the topic came up, then yes. Tell what you believe is the truth. Staying silent or affirming a something that you do not actually believe in is deceiving the person you are talking with. Yes, it might sting…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]

@anyone

I learned yesterday that we’re going to have a friend stay at our house all day next Saturday so I don’t think I’ll be able to join.

@hybridlore

I’m sorry, that sounds really hard. You were able to find a doctor that seemed like she knew what she was doing, right? Have they been able to figure out different ways to help you?

Thanks. Unfortunately she didn’t feel qualified to take my case and sent me to the clinic where she learned and they messed up pretty bad. I improved a l…[Read more]

thread, not forum :p

@artist-peoples-idk

Would anyone be interested in starting an art/illustration critique forum? Just curious, I think it might be fun, but I want to know if other people would want to before I create a new topic. Idk, just an idea. If nobody likes the idea that’s fine.

I can share more of what I had in mind if anyone would like.

@whalekeeper

I think for me, the most obvious way I can think of that one of my hobbies has bled into my writing life is my Boardgaming hobby. In my main WIP the political mastermind character is also a really big tabletop gamer and uses that as a metaphor for his political machinations.

@ellette-giselle oh sorry I forgot about that! Eddie would’ve loved to go with Rory, but she’s also the type to jump at the opportunity to go with any guy

@koshka @raxforge

The Twins 

Ellie rolled her eyes.

“Don’t let her scare you,” she said to Syph. “You don’t need a partner. You can just show up. You don’t even need to dance. You could…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I’m in Sunrise Peak as well!

Yeah, i guess so 🤷🏻‍♀️

@keilah-h @hybridlore

Thanks ladies!!

I’m kinda nervous to submit it, but idk why 🫣😂

@hybridlore

Thank you girl! Yeah, basically. It’s a lot more than that though. Pretty much about a year ago, I realized I was never going to get better if I kept letting my parents take care of my health (my mom has been helping me with my health via vitamins and stuff she found online for about 5 years after multiple Doctors said I had no cure).…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Hey! Yeah, it has been a long time. I don’t come on here much unless summoned. Honestly I’m probably at the hardest point in my life rn so I’m doing pretty bad most days, but it feels like I’ve grown more in this year than my entire life somehow 😂

How are you?

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@koshka @raxforge

Ellie 

“Great!” Eddie winked at Syph. “Now you just need to get yourself a girl.”

Rax turned to Ellie, “What about you, do you have a partner?”

She looked surprised. Her attempt to stay unnoticed by her classmates had failed quickly.

“Yes,” she said softly. “My friend Marcel.”

@ellette-giselle

Anti protection squad

This got me laughing out loud pretty hard XD

And, I’m sorry, but after meeting you in person, you’re too sweet to be a psychopath <3