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@valtmy

Another possible I just had was one I saw in a show once, where people registered children who had never been born and then grew them up over the years, and sold the identities to anyone who would pay for them. That could be a very profitable business in a dystopian world.

Yes, I could possibly tweak the order of events. Or else, Jean…[Read more]

@valtmy

*cue despair*

Well, the only thing I can think of now is that he fakes his own death and goes to live in a convent.

@valtmy

I know, it’s not entirely perfect yet 😛

Concerning #4, I hadn’t even thought of the woman being arrested, but you’re right. She would be, 😛 I’ll have to fix that up.

#5 My idea was that he had her name “legally” changed to Chessy.

#6 And this is where I run into problems. Its all very well for Jean to change his name and hide so well…[Read more]

@dekreel

No, I completely understand. Life has been mad for me too.

And yeah, we were talking about SFI. 🙂

@seekjustice  Which one?

Oh, and sorry I never came back to beta-reading SFI. I lost the notes page you emailed me and then life happened annnnd. . . yeah. So sorry. 😛 🙁

@rochellaine

Ah, so she does actually say she likes Kendall? Hmm…I didn’t know that

*wonders off to ponder for a while*

@valtmy @rochellaine

I do that everytime. I even went and copied the link, just never pasted it.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1T-tYVuU9CwMBJJgt4MIpkXj9fScSA3Z06DttCofZShk/edit?usp=sharing

@dekreel Hey! We’re just discussing my New York Times Bestseller WIP.

@valtmy  Sounds tedious. 😛

I’m doing more fan stuff. As usual.

@valtmy

Well, it definitely doesn’t follow the conventions of a romance novel, but there is a lot of romance…

I think I’ve fixed the dystopian problem actually. Hopefully. I’ve read a lot about the expected conventions, and been working on worldbuilding, and it actually fits a lot more snugly into those expectations than I would immediately…[Read more]

@rochellaine  @valtmy  @seekjustice  @alia  @ariel-ashira  @jenwriter17  @anyone

I think I’ll try to hack away this plot hole a bit. How are y’all doing? 🙂

@rochellaine @valtmy

Here’s the rough draft I wrote the other day (really late at night 😛 ). It’s in omniscient pov, since that’s how most prologues seem to be done, but i’m still to decide whether the abrupt switch of focus at the end works? Let me know what you think 😀

@rochellaine

I have never heard that expression before, but what immediately came to mind was something along the lines of the Olympic torch 😛

And yes, they are torches. 😀

Well, at least I know I’ve succeeded in the aspect of making sure they’re enjoyable to people who have never read the source material, which some other retelling authors…[Read more]

@valtmy

Well, with Rain and Kendall, I honestly want to spend more time developing Kendall, because I feel like he could be a vastly interesting character if I just put a bit more effort to him. That will probably come at the expense of any romantic hints though.

(Honestly, I never met for them to be a romantic pairing anyway. They were just…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Yeah, I see where you’re coming from. In my opinion, that’s where its difficult to balance in retellings how similar and how different you are from the original work. One of my other readers loved the similarities and some of them (like yourself) loved the differences. I have been leaning more toward cutting the Quillon and Rain…[Read more]

@Rochellaine

Sorry, I forgot to tag you above. 🙂

@valtmy

Yep, and I think someone else might have mentioned it as well. And I tend to agree, so I changed it. Would you like to have a quick look at my rough draft for the new one? I feel you may like it, seeing as you insisted so warmly on a backstory between Jean and Caderousse  (which I also agreed on).

Most people didn’t comment on it,…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Okay 😀

Well, I’ve rewritten the prologue so far. A few betas (I think Valtmy could have been one of them) suggested that the current prologue wasn’t really that important and it was told in a strange way (since it’s in third person when Sapph is one of the narrators anyway), so I redid it a bit different and am working the original…[Read more]

@valtmy @jenwriter17 @rochellaine

Anyone around at the moment? I’ve actually found some time to work on the third draft of SFI!