@perfectfifths
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Jane Maree replied to the topic Critique this? in the forum Poetry Critiques 8 years, 11 months ago
@Dekreel to tone it down from being so dark, you could change the aspects of fear and horror/dismay that the tree feels, to a sense of confusion and curiosity. That would shift the mood from ‘scary’ to a much lighter feel.
A way to avoid so much of the human terminology you can use similes instead. Saying “I feel a great, pulsing joy in my heart”…[Read more]
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@catwing I do like easter eggs (of both the dairy variety and the hidden one). I often put them in my own stories!
Good night (sounds so weird saying that. Its lunch time here ) good job! I FINISHED MY OUTLINE! I’m very excited!
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@catwing well i can’t read the sexond book till I’ve read the first!
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Joy and
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@emily I’m currently editing but once I’ve done half an hour of editing I’ll do some outlining for my NaNo novel.
It can be really hard to finish a project, especially when its something so long and time consuming as a novel, but the feeling of havinv finished it is absolutely amazing. Its definitely worth pushing through even when you don’t like…[Read more] -
SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@catwing after almost completing my outline i know what you mean about character development. My villain and my antagonist both need fleshing out. I saw one of your earlier posts too. Eight povs? Eek you are brave 🙂 I’ve never tried more than three, I think.
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@catwing pretty good! I’m moving much faster through my editing now that I’ve finished my rewriting. I’m almost finished my outline for my NaNo novel too.
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Joy replied to the topic Critique this? in the forum Poetry Critiques 8 years, 11 months ago
Anyone?
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SeekJustice replied to the topic Writers' Corner #10 in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@catwing I’ll be on in about half an hour. 😀
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Emma Flournoy and
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Joy replied to the topic Inspiration Board in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@kballen Haha love it!
Here’s mine:
“The journey of life isn’t about trying
to weather the storm, it’s about learning
to dance in the rain.” -
Joy and
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Snapper replied to the topic Inspiration Board in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@ingridrd I’m back…but if anyone comes along claiming I must return to the gold from whence I came, I don’t know what I’ll do. Especially is someone says:

that.
@salome01w4g *lights your sword* Go forth and conquer! -
Snapper replied to the topic Please critique this story! in the forum Short Story Critiques 8 years, 11 months ago
@ingridrd I can’t hug all of them!! I had like 120 stuffed animals…now I have guilt.
*sigh*
My only critique is that I though the dog was real so I was confused when you said the button nose was falling off…but otherwise it is really cute. 😀
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Please critique this story! in the forum Short Story Critiques 8 years, 11 months ago
@Ingridrd ooh, I’m getting strong velveteen rabbit/toy story vibes. 😀 I love the open end though; there’s still hope. 😉
And… believe it or not I really don’t have any criticism. It’s adorable. It made me feel guilty about my stuffed leopard that I haven’t talked to in ages. And it has that sweet, half-wistful tone of all stories told from the…[Read more] -
Snapper replied to the topic Inspiration Board in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
Even the king is against me.
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Snapper replied to the topic Inspiration Board in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 11 months ago
@ingridrd *cough* Dragons are our friends.
*flies off so as not to be beaten* - Load More
