@overcomer
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BlueJay replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@spradlin‘s answer to everything, “Submit it” 🙂 *Grins*
I love writing poetry @overcomer, but I’m terrible at critiquing it. 🙁 Sorry. -
Sarah Spradlin replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer I am a huge fan of this! Definitely something that I imagine being read at a coffee house type of event. I think it was pretty solid there until the very end, and then I think you lost some momentum with a few unwieldy stanzas. The last stanza was good though. 🙂 I love the motif of “waiting to be written, waiting to be read” that you…[Read more]
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Sarah Hoven replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer I really like the first verse, and the way you repeat it throughout the poem. 🙂
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Greta replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer
I love the topic for the poem! Okay, you said you wanted feedback…so here comes some feedback. 😛‘Till I am overcome
By the multitude in my mind
I am restless fromI would rewrite the last line in this stanza. I know it’s hard (believe me, I know) when you’re trying to find rhymes, but I think a different rhyme with “overcome” w…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
It’s a lovely poem, @Overcomer— great concept, nice dexterity with the words and such— I definitely think it has promise. The one thing I’m not getting though is a consistent sense of rhythm. I’ll be reading, and think I’ve got a rhythm, and then I keep reading and the very next sentence it’s disrupted. I get the impression there IS a rhythm…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
It’s a lovely poem, @Overcomer— great concept, nice dexterity with the words and such— I definitely think it has promise. The one thing I’m not getting though is a consistent sense of rhythm. I’ll be reading, and think I’ve got a rhythm, and then I keep reading and the very next sentence it’s disrupted. I get the impression there IS a rhythm…[Read more]
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
You tagged me, @Overcomer, but I think others will be better qualified to help you. Your assurance that I will not be sought vengeance on is greatly appreciated. 😀
That’s a neat poem, though. 🙂 I especially love the first three lines.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
You tagged me, @Overcomer, but I think others will be better qualified to help you. Your assurance that I will not be sought vengeance on is greatly appreciated. 😀
That’s a neat poem, though. 🙂
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Jess replied to the topic Editing Advice (Poem) in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer, I like the overall poem, it’s lovely, but it can be better still! 🙂 I don’t know about the stories sleeping in my head part. Maybe the stories imprisoned in my head or something along those lines because you mention not finding the key to release them? And while I’m talking about the key, perhaps “But still the key I keep.” I like…[Read more]
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BlueJay replied to the topic The Next Book Choosing in the forum Book Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
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@overcomer We’ve a topic for this, so head on over and join in. We are studying the first two chapters. 🙂 -
BlueJay replied to the topic The Next Book Choosing in the forum Book Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
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@overcomer We’ve a topic for this, so on over and join in. We are studying the first two chapters. 🙂 -
BlueJay replied to the topic The Next Book Choosing in the forum Book Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES! YES!
@overcomer We’ve a topic for this, so on over and join in. We are studying the first two chapters. 🙂 -
BlueJay replied to the topic The Sea in the forum Poetry Critiques 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer Thanks. I think I’ve changed “shiny” but I’ll go and check. 🙂
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BlueJay posted a new activity comment 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer *taps side of nose* You might… *mysterious grin* 😀
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Daeus replied to the topic Writers' Corner 2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer *checks internet space* Whew. Just barely enough. Squeeze on in.
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BlueJay replied to the topic Writers' Corner 2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer Yes, jump on board. 🙂
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Daeus replied to the topic Writers' Corner 2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer @dragon-snapper @kate-flournoy I’m gonna write till 9.
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Daeus replied to the topic Writers' Corner 2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
@overcomer @dragon-snapper @kater-flournoy I’m gonna write till 9.
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BlueJay posted an update 9 years, 6 months ago
I have got BIG news. (No I didn’t just get engaged.) I entered a writing competition a few months ago and the presentation for the prizes was last night. I had just moved out of the 14-18yrs, so I was against adults. *nervous gulp* But here are the results.
Adult short story – Anna’s Savanna – 1st place
Adult poetry – I’m proud to be Australian -…[Read more] -
Snapper replied to the topic Writers' Corner 2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 6 months ago
Unfortunately, I’m with @daeus …schools started up and all. Sorry, though I’ll probably be writing tonight (EST) around eight or so. @overcomer
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Wow!! Way to go, @Bluejay! Great work! Congratulations! So proud of you. 😀
@kate-flournoy Oh, thanks. 🙂 I was so shocked when it happened. 😀
Wow, @bluejay , that’s awesome! 😀
I hope we get to read some of this stuff …
@overcomer *taps side of nose* You might… *mysterious grin* 😀
And thanks. 🙂
That’s fantastic and super exciting! Congratulations! I love the fact that we have amazing KeePers who are sharing their stories. Great work! 🙂 🙂 🙂
From stories shared, we learn. 🙂 @christi-eaton I should go in for quote making. 😛
You totally should @bluejay 🙂 Who knows I may have to use some of your stuff. I love quotes, and accidentally stumbling across good ones 🙂
Sweet @bluejay! 🙂
😉 @daeus Totally (please tell me that you’ve seen Finding Nemo.)
@bluejay I have. What does that have to do with this?
@daeus How can you have watched it and still not know? *faints* Think, man, think. @julia-r Do you know?
Uum, I really don’t know. It’s been several years.
Oh okay. I’ll tell you. Actually, I’ll give you a hint. Think turtles. 🙂
Yup. Welcome to the EAC! Loved the little cameo in Finding Dory.
I got it! 😀
@christi-eaton & @julia-r Yay! You got it. 🙂
@bluejay– Awesome! That’s so cool! Writing competitions scare me. Way to be brave!
@julia-r Writing competitions can be scary. I felt sick as we were driving over. But it is a great reward for all the hard work put into story writing.
Congratulations! That’s really exciting. You keep writing those stories, and someday you’ll make a difference in the world.
@anna-brie I hope to make a difference one day. My younger sister wants to publish a set of stories about a cat called Chaos, that I’ve written, so maybe one day….
Woo Hoo! Way to go, @bluejay
@clairec Thank you. 🙂
Congratulations, @bluejay!!!!!! That is so exciting!
@hope I still can’t believe that it’s happened!!!!!!! Thanks.
@dragon-snapper Finding writing competitions is definitely hard. I only know one or two.
*grins* No worries. *takes one of the ice creams and sits licking it happily*
@dragon-snapper For some reason your comment has disappeared. 🙁 Did you want to write a new one? 😉
*sniffs pitifully* It doesn’t like me!!! Wahhh!
Anyways, I said something about finding KP in my search for writing competitions, and Congratulations!
@dragon-snapper I think it was partly my fault. Did you “reply” to the comment I sent to Hope. Cause I found a spelling error in my message, after you had posted, and so I deleted it and made a new message and it probably took yours too. You can go to you history if you wanted to find out what you said.
DUDETTE!!!! THIS IS SO AWESOME!!!! *high fives all around* SERIOUSLY AWESOME JOB! I am so proud of you! 😀 😀 😀
*returns high five* Ah, thanks Sarah. 😀 😀 😀
Oh, wow @bluejay! That’s awesome! Much applause! 😀
🙂 😀 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 Thank you. 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 🙂
Yay!!! That’s so exciting! I would’ve been so nervous to go up against adults. Good for you! 🙂 Would you mind posting Chaos and The Drummer Boy? I’d sure like to read them. 🙂
@sarah-h I was nervous. Extremely nervous. I only expected a highly commended. I will definitely let you read Chaos and The Drummer Boy. I shall send them to @spradlin for publishing. (Only with Chaos, it’s a series of stories which if you read number 3. (which this one is) it won’t make much sense. I shall have to send in 1 & 2.
@bluejay Great! I can’t wait to read them! 🙂
Hey, hey! @bluejay That’s awesome! 😀 😀 😀 😀 CONGRATULATIONS. <3
Thanks @gretald
So happy for you, @bluejay! Congratulations!
@ingridrd 🙂 😀 🙂 😀 Thanks.
You rock, dude! (How’s that for a Finding Nemo reference. 😛 )
You won ALL the categories??!!
@BlueJay
Sweet…..Totally! 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 There were more categories, but those four were the ones I entered. 🙂
So you won all four of the ones you entered!!
That is just…wow.
@emma-flournoy I only got an encouragement award for one of the categories. 🙂
Oh whoops…it says that. 😛
But still!
Wow–that’s awesome @bluejay! Congrats!!!
Thanks @aratrea 🙂
@jadamae Thank you. Well, I thought people might get a bit confused as we had just been told BIG news and then I said I had BIG news. 🙂 🙂 🙂
Aw @winter-rose Thank you.
You guys are all so awesome. 🙂