Mallory O'Bier

@Overcomer I think it’s adorable and hilarious. It also has some flow problems. The big thing is probably that all of the verses seem to follow a different rhythm, which disconnects them and messes with the ‘oneness’ 😛 of the poem. I would say pick one rhythm and go with it.

@overcomer Very nice! I’ve been hearing birds like that all week, and I love it! I’m glad you were able to show that in this poem. 😀

@overcomer It’s a nice poem. I did feel that the following lines were a bit bumpy, but otherwise thumbs up.

I should have liked to have learned it
But thus their displeasure incurred
And I looked after them feeling absurd

@overcomer That’s a great answer! I know for myself, I’m never fully motivated to write a story until I know what sort of theme I’m hoping to tackle with the story, so I’m right there with you on that!

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@daeus @kate-flournoy @jess @winter-rose @ethryndal @bluejay @aella @anyone else @overcomer
And I’m writing again, for whoever wants to join.

@winter-rose @daeus @kate-flournoy @jess @bluejay @overcomer @ethryndal @aella @anyone-else I’ll be doing more of the fun writing stuff if anyone wants to join me.

(yes, I copy and pasted my previous post) 😛

@winter-rose @daeus @kate-flournoy @jess @bluejay @overcomer @ethryndal @aella @anyone-else I’ll be doing more of the fun writing stuff if anyone wants to join me.

@overcomer Fare thee well!

@winter-rose @overcomer You still here? The Elf has shown up late to the writing party.

@overcomer @winter-rose I have to fly now, but I was able to write about 2 1/2 paper. Good luck to you two!

@overcomer I’ll be here for an uncertain amount of time. If I suddenly fly off, you’ll know why.

@northerner @winter-rose @bluejay @ethryndal @perfectfifths @jess @daeus @kate-flournoy @overcomer
I’m going to be doing some more brainstorming/worldbuilding/allthethings if anyone wants to join me.

@overcomer, about a thousand words. It took me quite a while to decide which of three stories to work on, but once I decided things went fast.

@overcomer @northerner @winter-rose Okay, I’m back and ready to write/plan. 😛

I’ll be writing for a while too, @dragon-snapper, @overcomer. It’s surprising how much more I get done when I’m racing with someone.

@overcomer Huzzah! We have won! I finally found out which story I’m going to write next along with the theme course. Thanks for writing!

@overcomer I will be with you for unknown amount of time. Might have to leave in a few minutes, but I’ll see if I can be productive. 😛

@overcomer Awesome! Glad to hear that you’re excited and have previous course testing experience. 🙂 Looking forward to having you in the beta group.

@sarah-h Thanks! Glad to hear it sounded appealing, and definitely understand your present circumstances. 🙂