Mallory O'Bier

@lightningmouse Apologies for the glitch, but thanks for pointing that out to us! We’ll be working on fixing that file. In the meantime, if you go to https://kingdompen.org/subscribe/ and put your email address in there, that link should work to get you the 2016 ebook. 🙂

@kate-flournoy Nice count. I went through a couple of notes my dad made on my book and proofread my first chapter again.

@kate-flounoy Nice count. I went through a couple of notes my dad made on my book and proofread my first chapter again.

@Daeus not a problem. From eight to now I got 724 words. How was it for you?

@kate-flournoy I’m late, but I’m here.

@Winter-Rose awesome! Tag me when you stop. I’m planning on going until nine.

@Daeus I am having internet trouble again but I’m still planning to write. Tag me when you’re on. Anyone else, feel free to jump in. The more the merrier.

@Northerner yeah. It was extremely poorly done, to say the least. I didn’t really have a problem with Tauriel actually— even though I’m a Tolkien purist as well 😛 — but the instant they made her the point of a triangle I lost everything I liked about her. It was just so not worth it. I still really enjoyed a lot of the Hobbit movies— Bilbo…[Read more]

@Daeus good point. Yes. Man’s depravity would more correctly fit in with the eventual message. *goes and changes it in her brainstorming file*

Yo, I’m writing till 4:20 if anyone’s interested.

@kate-flournoy Looks good. It might be clearer to phrase the theme as “man’s state,” but that’s minor.

So I did this… this homework stuff is awesome. 😀
Theme: Man’s depravity.
Focusing question: what makes man good or evil?
Possible answers:
a. his justification
b. his position
c. his influence
d. his upbringing
e. the state of his heart

… and then spin that off into one big question that sets up the rest of the series: what makes a man’s hea…[Read more]

So I did this… this homework stuff is awesome. 😀
Theme: Man’s depravity.
Focusing question: what makes man good or evil?
Possible answers:
a. his justification
b. his position
c. his influence
d. his upbringing
e. the state of his heart

… and then spin that off into one big question that sets up the rest of the series: what makes a man’s hea…[Read more]

@Sierra-R I’m not familiar with the Phantom of the Opera one, but as for the Hobbit one— *gag* Please. Don’t even get me started. 😛 The number one problem with it was that it was basically a crush that got treated like real love to the exclusion of a love that had been growing for centuries. Now Legolas in that movie had some SERIOUS…[Read more]

@audrey-caylin I’d like to hear anything you’ve learned from working on a trilogy. this is my first one.

The three themes will be tied together. The personal theme is the meaning of life, which is also the main theme. The two others are supporting themes, so the understanding of atonement and the victory of good lead to an understanding of the…[Read more]

I decided this homework stuff is pretty awesome, so I’m doing it myself. I’m hoping to write a trilogy here, so I’m trying to study my overall story theme in order to start plotting the individual books. I came up with these three themes, focusing questions, and answers.

Themes:
1. Good and Evil (FQ: which will ultimately win?)
2. The meaning of…[Read more]

@emma-flournoy Well, Eugene would take these walks and Headstone would follow him everywhere, but Eugene would always pretend not to notice his existence in order to drive him to fury. It wasn’t really good, but it was interesting.

Great poem, @overcomer. I echo what everyone else said, but I noticed a few things in the last stanza.

They flew off refusing me an encore
So rapidly their wings whirred
‘Til they were lost among the trees
And I looked after them feeling absurd

Maybe cut out “and” in the last line. I feel like “refusing me an encore” could be first so that i…[Read more]

Great poem, @overcomer. I echo what everyone else said, but I noticed a few things in the last stanza.

They flew off refusing me an encore
So rapidly their wings whirred
‘Til they were lost among the trees
And I looked after them feeling absurd

Maybe cut out “and” in the last line. I feel like “refusing me an encore” could be first so that i…[Read more]

@emma-flournoy The ending was probably the worst part for me. Eugene’s positive change was very unconvincing and cliche. I don’t know if there were any redeeming qualities, except perhaps when Headstone and Eugene have that midnight walk thing.