Mallory O'Bier

@winter-rose *shoves the melted ring back into your hands* Take it. I’d rather not have it be my burden to bear. Good luck on your speech! (just don’t go — I have an ANOUNCEMENT! I am leaving… — and then pull a Bilbo card and disappear.)

@that_writer_Girl_99 Worry not. In Star Wars, I am Han Solo. Who are you?
@catwing You, indeed and without a doubt, are a writer. No one could create such a horrible backstory. XD

@catwing Don’t do that…*shudder* We don’t need more dark lords…I like you better as a Middle Earthian catwing.

@catwing Don’t do that…*shudder* We don’t need more dark lords…I like you better as a Middle Earthian catwing.

@catwing Don’t do that…*shudder* We don’t need more dark lords…I like you as a Middle Earthian catwing.

@catwing @winter-rose Nuts. You found out. I have the ring because it is my source of power. Not only shall the chairs fear me, but so shall all of Middle Earth! Haha!

@winter-rose Well…if you don’t pledge your allegiance to any stewards, it shouldn’t be so bad. 😉
How is college?

@catwing Bestiest dragon? 😉 Awesome. Has a nice ring to it. 😀

@winter-rose Things going well in the Shire. Nice and peaceful with roast chicken. 🙂
@catwing Correctomundo.
Everyone loves Toothless. 😛

@that_writer_Girl_99 As a writer, it is my job to inform you that the possibilities are endless.

@winter-rose Frodo, greetings!
@daughteroftheking
*chases cowardly chairs*

@that_writer_girl_99 *glances at the floor*
*grins*
Heh heh heh.. 🙂
@catwing If the shaking is distracting you, let me know. I’ll melt it. 😛 XD

@daughteroftheking Then my reputation proceeds me. Fear me, all ye KaPeefer chairs!

@catwing @that_writer_Girl_99 @daughteroftheking @winter-rose Let’s see if I can do this without melting any chairs. I’m on.

@aislinn-mollisong Alright, I read the prologue and chapter one. Josiah basically covered everything already. I’ll just see if I can go into a few more details.

First of all, the secret ingredient really is slowing down. I’m going to be more extreme than Josiah here. I would say slow things down four times what it is now, maybe even more for the…[Read more]

@aislinn-mollisong I only had time to look through the prologue and chapter one, but here’s a couple things I noted:

The prose feels very choppy and is very bare-bones. Try fleshing out your descriptions more and varying the sentence structure for the writing to feel more smooth.

You do a lot of telling as opposed to showing, which is probably…[Read more]

@aislinn-mollislong Yes, that would be fine.

@aislinn-mollisong Well, I can’t read through your whole book unfortunately, but if you could give me a sample scene, I could read through that and see if I can identify the problem.

Praying, everybody.