Mallory O'Bier

@catwing To be honest, I want to read it too. *sigh* Now I have to finish writing this trilogy to get there….
Little details: There’s a hat, a jet and a party.
Eventually, it will have beta-readers. Eventually…

@aislinn-mollisong Ohhh, I like it a lot!

@catwing Awww…glad he was okay!

@shannon @emily @salome01w4g @seekjustice @daughteroftheking
My sister Greta could use some prayer right now. She is very sick, possibly with strep throat and showing some symptoms of mono. Please pray that it is neither and that she will recover quickly. Thx!

@catwing Good job with the improvements. 😀

I also liked @perfectfifths‘ improvements. I’ll go off those and add some adjustments myself.

Alex is not normal. She and her friends talk with animals. (No need to say they understand animals. That’s assumed if they talk with them.)

Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who…

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@seekjustice @jess-penrose @jane-maree *feels really pleased my suggestions were so helpful* 😉 😛

@catwing Ultimately it’s up to you to decide. And based on all the versions I’ve read, each one giving a little more about the story than before, yet still keeping it a mystery, I’d love to read this book as well. 😀

@Catwing well I was away last night and this morning, so I failed to see this until just now, sorry. xD Looks like you’ve have lots of great advice though. 😀
I second what Louise said–her rewritten synopsis of suggestions is basically what I would’ve said myself. 😛

@catwing I think I like the second one better, but with a few tweaks (all suggestions of course 😉 ).

Alex is not normal. She talks with her wolves. And understands them.
Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who gives them a riddle from a long dead tyrant. They must save Allore by finding three jewels, and giving them to…[Read more]

@mariposa So glad you asked! 😀
It’s a Utopian Science Fiction, the setting is Earth in the 22nd century.

@emily

How do you make it have that bar thing before something that you copy from another section?

Select the text and click the B-QUOTE button.

You guys these are so awesome!!! Great job all!
*steeples fingers* And now thou have all inspired me to make another.
I give you a collage for a new book which will be a standalone that I probably won’t get to until next year (AAAAHHHH WHY? GRR!) Anyway, yes. I absolutely cannot wait to write it and I think it’ll probably be my most thematically…[Read more]

Had to share one more of my own. These are two characters from a novella idea I had a while back.

@Aislinn-Mollisong got it. 🙂 You did mention that you weren’t going to use that in the final, but I wanted to make sure. They’re fine to use for fun, but if you’re going to use them commercially in any way… yep. Copyrights. 😉

Awesome! Show it to me when you’re done.

@Aislinn-mollisong it looks great, but I’ve seen that image floating around and I’m pretty sure it’s not free; did you find the artist and ask for copyright license?

But as far as composition and layout, it looks great. The only thing is you might want to consider a slightly bolder, straighter font. Something more in tune with the fantasy mood.

@that_writer_girl_99 I’m actually very interested to know what you found out…

@jane-maree Those are brilliant! Love, love, love. 😉

@emily and @shannon
I’ll pray! Have a great time!

@catwing First of all, go get a copy of How To Write A Sizzling Synopsis. It’s a very good book.

That said, here are a few tips to get you started. I’m working off your most recent synopsis.

1. Yes, use as few names as possible. Say “main character and his five friends” or something like that.
2. When you say these people are not normal–even…[Read more]

@seekjustice You made sense. 😉 And yes, I agree. But not knowing who the main character(s) is/are (or if they’re all main characters), I didn’t comment on it.

@catwing Yes, it is better. May I make a couple more suggestions? *does it anyway* 😉

I’d remove “you could even say they were abnormal” because it’s redundant with the previous sentence.
Good job using short sentences, but too many at once makes it too bitty – there’s a balance. 🙂
For example, the last two sentences. As written, they would read…[Read more]