OrangeArmadillo

Yay, Wyoh didn’t eat those words! You have no idea how glad I am. *sweats*

@linus-smallprint

I have… a lot of feedback. *coughs*

Thank you Linus for giving me access to this story! I have a lot of thoughts and I hope they can be of some use to you! Obviously these are my opinions, so use them as you will. 🙂

Characters:

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Love Tyn. H…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Thank you! Yes, Zuko was my favourite, along with his Uncle Iroh. I love redemption arcs, and Zuko’s was very well done.

Yayy!! We should totally make (or revitalize) a topic for that show. This forum needs to experience some great fanart for AtLA, and you are definitely the best artist for the job.

I might write a fuller explanation about what I believe about this matter (taking into account what Ellette said about putting images into the reader’s mind), but the gist of it is that someone is always going to be bothered by this.

Linus has made a very harmless representation of magic. This is just imagery of humans developing animalistic t…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

AAH it’s Zuko!! I love Zuko so much. Well done; you translated the anime-like style of the show to your own interpretation, and it looks great! Was he your favorite character?

@rae

*Looks at Baron with a contemplative expression* The guilt is strong with this one…

We watched Fiddler on the Roof and ate homemade oliebollen. 🙂

@ellette-giselle

Oh no!!! That’s terrible!!! That makes me want to cry for you!

I know. I was so mad.

Hmm, I find it funny that you think the ending thing feels a little un-realistic. I wrote it after reading of five different situations in different countries where something like this happened to Believers who had been arrested. XD

I guess the B…

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THEOLOGY/MESSAGE

~ Any theological concerns for the story?

I don’t think so.

~ What would you say my world view was?

Christian? XD. (Again, I don’t really know what kind of answer you want here.)

~ What would you say was the message of the story?

God will give us strength when we are weak and help us have the courage to stand up for Him.

~Were…

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STORYLINE

~ Was the plot solid and engaging?

~ Did the pacing feel consistent throughout the book? If not, where did it lag or feel dull?

I feel like these two kind of go together. The pacing, I felt, was not very consistent. Sometimes we would be skipping over weeks or months, sometimes we would get slow, slice-of-life scenes, and sometimes we…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m flexible, so whenever everyone else is ready to read the next book is fine with me. And is it about Leon and Julian?

K, here’s the characters section.
CHARACTERS

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Joseph, because he’s the main. 🤪 But no, really, we got to see all his inner…[Read more]

I WAS LITERALLY ON THE ILLUSTRATION QUESTION 😣

@ellette-giselle

I was so, so close to finishing your questions, and then a bee came over by me, and I picked up my laptop and ran away (lol.)

But then I accidentally hit the screen somehow and I CLOSED THE LINK!!!

Augggghhhh. I cannot believe that just happened. Now I have to write them all out AGAIN. So this might take a while.

@ellette-giselle

AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]