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If you’ve ever seen the first Puss in Boots movie from Dreamworks, there’s a giant mama goose that actually does a good amount of damage to the town she invades while looking for her chick, who the main characters stole. Basing on that alone (I’ve never met a free-roaming goose, that I remember at least), I can see just an ordinary giant goose…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint oh, good to know I’m not alone then! It’s not discouraging at all, it’s just one of those thoughts you have when you’re trying to sleep but your brain won’t let you. Y’know.

 

And I’m glad you have an explanation ready for why this section feels rushed. Makes sense.

 

and bruh that Canada meme! We have somethin’ like that…[Read more]

@grcr you’re welcome 😁

@linus-smallprint ooh interesting!!

Alan’s character development is showing through! It does seem a tiny bit sudden, but I don’t know cause I’ve never actually seen a person get saved and them follow their life immediately afterward. I was saved when I was really young and effectively don’t even remember it, so I can’t even use myself as an…[Read more]

@grcr very cool, and I like his name!

@ellette-giselle I echo Linus’s statement–this was a great way to re-introduce Adrian to the narrative!

@power I had a song on in the background that started epic then turned really goofy as I read your little poem and it was perfect for it lolllll

thing is, it was by complete coincidence.

 

@freed_and_redeemed oooh nice scene!!

@ellette-giselle no it’s not bad, I just haven’t read it yet. Lol

It maybe’z a battle

Or were it a fray

But wes don’t care

In our tree’s

Fars away!

Fights are just funz

And battles more tons

Kuz squirrels just go nuts

eating cinnamon buns!

We watches them duke

And we’s sees them duck

Boxing like bunnies

We sits there

Awestruck!

Then up goes a cheer

But down wentz our treat!

So down wez go too

Cu…[Read more]

@grcr very cool!

 

also I agree with whalekeeper that the lower half of the body is a nightmare. I can’t draw the standard 8-head body length; all my characters end up six or so heads in proportional height because any time I try to draw legs as long as everyone says to, it always makes them look way too skinny and stretched.

 

Maybe that’s…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @hybridlore wherever you decide to move this discussion, can you tag me too? I’m having fun learning about this.

 

 

 

@whaley wow I would watch a TV show or read a multi-part comic about those numbers as you think of them, that’s super cool.

@linus-smallprint ooof Ender’s Game.

Good example for a dystopian writer, horribly graphic writing (and also the occasional curse words? I remember there being Marvel-level cursing but not much worse).

Luckily I’m not the kind who’s perturbed by violence in writing. Watching it would be a different story, but reading that kind of thing really…[Read more]

You’re not wantonly throwing bloody battle scenes in. You’re writing a realistic impression of a story.

 

Remember the missionaries to that one South American tribe that were brutally murdered, but the survivors came back to that tribe to continue the mission? Stories like that are what your writing reminds me of. This sounds really weird, but…[Read more]

do the songs have to be lyrical or can some of them be instrumentals?

@ellette-giselle Believe me, these stories are marketed for 8-year-olds:

• Wings of Fire (dragon series I read once with a good deal of violence. One character’s death is so graphic the writer didn’t even describe it, although that was in a side story that I didn’t read though cause it didn’t grab me.)
• Warrior cats series (LOTS of war and…

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@freed_and_redeemed yessss I will totally do that!!

now to find some songs.

@freed_and_redeemed just saw this and AWW LEON WHYYYY

 

it’s such a good piece though

@ellette-giselle not a ramble! At least you’re rambling about your writing and not about something random…..as I do quite commonly…..eheheheheh you remember THOSE conversations which I’m NOT gonna bring up on this forum after this lolllll

And I think 13 is fine tbh. Your books are actually not that bad in terms of violence so far.

@ellette-giselle aww cute, although I have NO idea who Kenna and Zeke are lolll

@ellette-giselle 17, almost 18. Remember how I was making a big deal about Sabina getting married that young because I could barely imagine getting married at my age? lol