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Daeus replied to the topic PRAYER REQUESTS #2 in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 9 months ago
@valtmy I know this uncertainty. You can be sure that you’ll be in my prayers.
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic You know you are a writer when… in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 9 months ago
You know you’re a writer when you’re watching a murder mystery with your family and you say something like, “Wouldn’t it be interesting if they switched places because no one would know the difference…” unwittingly revealing the key to the entire mystery before the murder even takes place. :/
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Daeus replied to the topic Arrows, spears, and other pointy things… in the forum Fantasy 6 years, 9 months ago
@aislinn-mollisong Yes, I once wrote a scene where my MC was taught to use a sword. There are of course many different approaches to teaching someone sword fighting, mainly depending on how much time is available. Generally, you’re taught footwork first, then sword drills are added on. A sword drill is a single maneuver practiced over and over.
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Daeus replied to the topic Kingdom Pen Captions in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 9 months ago
Hahaha!
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Self-Doubt… in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 9 months ago
@Dekreel basically what has already been said. I struggle with this too. Especially recently. I found an author whose skill in my chosen genre is so crazily far beyond my own I don’t dare dream I’ll ever reach it.
And much as I hate to admit this, that thought drives me absolutely bonkers.
It’s not that I’m jealous of him, just that I loathe…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Self-Doubt… in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 9 months ago
@dekreel God’s writing a story right here, right now.
When I’ve doubted and struggled (which happens all the time), the only where I can turn is to my favorite (and, tbh, sometimes least favorite) author and say, “I trust you to write this story till its final, marvelous end.”
Now that I’ve done the popular thing and given the best advice I can…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic An idea in the forum Questions and Support 6 years, 9 months ago
@dekreel This topic is two years old, back when Sarah was still with us.
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Daeus replied to the topic An idea in the forum Questions and Support 6 years, 9 months ago
@supermonkey42 Can’t remember exactly. It was either lack of involvement or I didn’t have enough time.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@Daeus Yay! *lemonade and cheesecake for all*
I definitely prefer “Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”.
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
Oh, one more question. Do you prefer the ending lines:
“Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”
or
“Awestruck to see that in night the lights dance”
???
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
Thanks everyone! @emma-flournoy @ariella-newheart @rochellaine
I think I’ve got it now. I’ll come back to this a few months from now to see if I can make any small improvements, but I think it’s generally solid. 😀
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
‘Most comely he smiled’ is better
And little Teedletiden he fashioned for the trees
For all of these a city, Letharill, he made
Its glory was established that it should never fade[ I’m unsure about the meter in these last three lines, especially lines 1 and 3.]Maybe instead: ‘And little Teedletiden he fashioned for trees
For all t…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@warrioroftherealm *salutes* Awesome!
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@christianna-hellwig @rochellaine @emma-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99
Thanks so much for your suggestions, everyone! Here’s what I have now.
“Oh, stars that remember the firstthings forgotten
How earth and its peoples were early begotten
They looked and beheld through a pane of dark glass
The earth in a swirling, untamable mass
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@christianna-hellwig Thanks so much! I’ll take a look over this as soon as I get a chance.
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@emma-flournoy Ha! Well, we’ll see. I’d certainly love to.
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@Daeus Thanks.
Well, you’d better come up with an epic soundtrack for it then. 😉
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@emma-flournoy Sure, here’s one. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oV9qnLtpy4Cwn8-JFfJaXzOn4A5-yqRBR-AqlFIyYdk/edit?usp=sharing
Yeah, song creation and all that. I probably should have come up with something more original, but in my defense the song creation is the basis for the whole magical system, the last book’s allegorical aspects, and the…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@that_writer_girl_99 @rochellaine Thanks. 😀
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Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Song for my book in the forum Poetry Critiques 6 years, 9 months ago
@Daeus Oh hey, could I have it in a doc too? I was going to do it without one, but that sounds a much more efficient option.
I don’t write poetry, but I certainly appreciate good poetry, especially with good cadence. That’s my favorite part.
I read through it, and it’s beautiful, and I do have some metrical suggestions.
Also, I feel compelled…[Read more]
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