Michael Stanton

Awesome topic, people! Love it— everything said here thus far I completely agree with; in fact, you guys got most of it already. 😉

Another thing I’ll just add, though, is watch out for ‘telling’ in POV, even. Let me give you an example.
Trevor blinked, frozen in his seat, his heart thumping furiously in his ears. This was the chance of a…[Read more]

Believe it or not, @bluejay, I have no idea. 😛 Fine excuse for an Ohioan I make. 😉

Thanks @writefury. 😛

Wonderful @spradlin!

Though I have a hard time imagining a bard singing something like this in a tavern… more like at a funeral. 😛

My assorted thoughts on this piece:
-As I said in my critique, the humor in this story is great and is still great this time around. Thumbs up from me for that.
-I second most of what other people have already said about the debit card and ticks.
-I really liked the parallels you were drawing between Anna and Savanna in terms of the spectrum…[Read more]

The fact that he doesn’t hear whether or not she’s dead or alive before this letter, and doesn’t even try to find out, strikes me as odd, but I guess I could see a bully-type character being too embarrassed to do that and such. Anyways, onto the actual request, I’m going to try to put myself in the position of this character. Assuming that he…[Read more]

Hey, who says you can’t be willing to die for frozen raspberries @Daeus!?!? Why else do you think they say ‘to die for’?

😛

Hm, yes @spradlin… though that might more denote (get it? Denote? *sigh* Okay, that was really bad) a… community for sharing noteworthy thoughts than a blog of just one person’s noteworthy thoughts.

I don’t know… thoughts?

Yes. I did just use ‘thoughts’ way too many times in one paragraph.

Ah— gotcha @Daeus. Thanks so much.

Yes, I know what you mean… it’s funny, but I’ve tried over and over and over to poeticize (like my made up word? 😛 ) about an object, but for some reason I can only do it about really deep thoughts. Concepts, if you will. Like with this one, I wanted to take the word ‘love’, which is so commonly misused…[Read more]

WAIT WHAT NO @SPRADLIN REALLY??? I can’t imagine why… 😛

Eh… that might be a bit of a reach. 😉

Let’s see. *waits for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*still waits for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*continues to wait for bolts of inspiration from the blue*

*concludes that there is no such thing as a bolt from the blue, and as for inspiration, it is a fallacious fairytale our teachers…[Read more]

We were posting at the same time @spradlin! 😀

Thanks for the pointers— I can see how that would be a problem, definitely. Would it work, do you think, to cut each line in half, where most of them have a slant rhyme with the middle of the prior line?

Thanks, @Daeus and @faithdk!

Couple questions, Daeus… ‘toil’ is a one syllable word. ???
Also, I’m not quite sure what you meant about replacing ‘cruel’ with ‘and’… I can’t seem to grasp what specific changes you were getting at.
And… oh yeah. Oops. He did lose his shield, didn’t he? *gulp* Man, that’s embarrassing. 😛
All your other…[Read more]

Oh, and @overcomer… 😛 😉

@spradlin, @hislittlerose, @jadamae… you guys are all poets. What do you think?

Okay @Daeus, @hope, @anyone-else-who-liked this, I’ve been working over it, and I think I’ve got it finished. I want to publish it with KP, but I want to know what you guys think of it first. Without further ado, here it is in it’s entirety.

And just because, here’s the link to the music I was listening to when I wrote the last verse. I think it…[Read more]

Haha, that’s so funny! We got so close! 😛

Haha, that’s so funny!

828 words, @bluejay. Yourself?