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Sef

“That’s so cool,” she said. “Can you-can you do me?” she wanted to know.

@ellette-giselle

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Gah… that’s not how it ends… right? RIGHT?! 😶😶

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I like how you wrote this part:

For some reason, though he knew what was going to happen, the whole situation didn’t seem real. In fact, after the initial horrified shock, Jonathan no longer felt the stabbing fear. He was numb physically and mentally. The more he t…

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@ellette-giselle

This is really good! I still don’t understand how you can write so fast…

Like I get that you have it all planned out…I have mine planned out too, exactly what I want to happen, but I still can’t write it that fast, I’m too much of a perfectionist and want everything to be exactly how I want XD

The only critique was that…[Read more]

@esther-c

Is @calyhuge gonna crash our scene? Or am I supposed to RP?

I’m lost sorry lol

@rae

I’m sorry, I’ve just been super lazy with my RP’ing lately XD XD

here you go! <3

Sef

“She’s pretty,” Sef smiled. “How can you get her picture in your eyes?” she asked, feeling dumb for asking, but the curiosity  wouldn’t recede.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks girl <3

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!

I’m just trying to be super careful that I’m still honoring God with my writing. And I’m also paranoid about my writing XD

@ellette-giselle

Haha you’re good!

But question–  do you think it’s too dark?

Huh I don’t know if you tagged me or not, I’ll look at it sometime today!!! 👍👍

@rae

And you can rip apart my writing too XD XD

@rae

In my opinion, just don’t think of him as a “hero” when he sacrifices himself. You can still keep him the same, just don’t think of him the same way.

Idk if this is making sense…

I tried lol

@theshadow

You’re good!!!! Haha thanks for wanting to read it!!!

@everyone

Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD

Chapter 13

Decay

“Sssef! I’m not paying you to ssstand there doing nothing,” the Pythonos’s voice carried, snapping her back to attention.

“Yes sir,” she lowered her head, her cheeks flushing with embarrassment as her fellow workers all looked up from their work.

Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she turned back to the pile of trash. I…[Read more]

@rae

I don’t think anyone was saying that you need to change Chase. Like Loopy and Whaley said, it’s not bad that he has that flaw, because he’s a flawed character that grows and changes in your story. We were just concerned that you were portraying him as more of a hero and that flaw was celebrated.

@whalekeeper @loopylin correct me if I’m wrong…XD

@ellette-giselle

What was he thinking? Hmm, maybe he WASN’T thinking. He often tries to do what’s right……. but sometimes he would do with a good long moment of thought process.

*sighs*

Now, because he didn’t think, he’s gonna die. So cold, so sad, bye-bye now. (Moral of the story; always think before you act kids)

lol 😂😂

Anyone want to read what h…

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@whalekeeper

Hahaha 🤣🤣🤣

@whalekeeper

Thanks girl, that makes me feel a lot better 💗💗💗

You’re the best Whaley!!! <3

You literally ALWAYS know what to say!!! (:

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]

@loopylin

I’m listening to it now XD XD