Masyn

Okay guys. Tag me whenever you finish up.

@Daeus ohhhh… Yes. That one. I actually didn’t care for that one as a sentence, but the breeze that would change the world was a nice touch.

@Daeus okay, sure. No problem. Tag me if/when you start.

@Daeus @Dragon-Snapper I’m writing… join in. How far do you guys wanna go? I’m going till 9:45, but don’t feel obligated.

About starting off with the theme thing, I mean.

Yeah. That.

Obviously I can’t take credit for you being an all around awesome person.

@Emma-Flournoy *beams proudly* I have taught you well, my young apprentice.

XD

@Daeus what, the one that goes ‘The songs of the dead are the lamentations of the living’ one? I’m not sure I remembered that right, but it was the best I could do on short notice… 😛

@Dragon-Snapper what they said— questions. Not necessarily something gaudy or high-tension— just questions.

Heyyyy! Kenya! Nice to see you again! 😀
I think the story could have a lot of potential, but you’d need to think up a plot that would actually keep the story moving and make so many different children and families necessary. It doesn’t have to be complicated— it could be as simple as some bad-guy scientist trying to get them back, and their…[Read more]

@Daeus yes, I love it. I obviously know the story, which may or may not mess up my perspective, but it’s strong to me and makes me want to pick it up and read it… lots of questions.

@Daeus yes! Much better. The only thing that’s a little off is this sentence:

Setting out to find new strength, he plummets into struggles for survival, desperate plots, uncertainties, and the vague shadow surrounding his destiny from a dying mentor’s vision.

I think it’s just the ‘into struggles for survival’ part— maybe I’m being picky, b…[Read more]

@Daues yes! Much better. The only thing that’s a little off is this sentence:

Setting out to find new strength, he plummets into struggles for survival, desperate plots, uncertainties, and the vague shadow surrounding his destiny from a dying mentor’s vision.

I think it’s just the ‘into struggles for survival’ part— maybe I’m being picky, b…[Read more]

Mmmm… yes. I like this. Not really much to attack… the one thing that jumped out at me as needing some work was you used this sentence structure:

Something something something, some resulting something something something result.

a lot. With the comma after the first few set-up words, then a tacked-on resulting thought. There’s nothing…[Read more]

Ohhhhhh… yikes. Well. Yes. That would definitely put a damper on your chances of attendance. 😛

@PerfectFifths

@Daeus actually I have to go. Good luck.

Well, you never asked. 😛 I actually have to go to bed at ten so it’s more like 9:45, but close enough. Company is welcome.

Here you are. Though this was for this years.

@Daeus I actually usually go till ten… 😛 But not tonight. I’ll be with you as far as nine, then I’m stopping cuz my dad and brother are coming home from a hunting trip and that’s when they’re supposed to get here.

🙁 That’s too bad. Where do you live again?

Yes @PerfectFifths— Indiana, for this one.