Masyn

@DaughteroftheKing *excessively evil chuckling*

This topic.

I likey.

Well, it sounds like you have a good thing going already— he seems a very detailed, duplicitous character just on the surface without people knowing he’s got an evil layer, and that’s brilliant. If the character seems complete as he is (with his own little contradictions…[Read more]

@Dragon-Snapper what they all said.

I will just add that it’s definitely not an uncommon problem to have. There were times in the past two years as I waded through two drafts of my WIP that I just felt like going and drowning any capability of conscious thought in a deluge of mindless articles— anything to save myself from having to open my…[Read more]

@Aratrea I really like it!

First thing I noticed— in your bio you said, when you were describing KP, ‘through proficiency and purpose.’ I thought it was ‘with proficiency and purpose.’

If it’s possible, it might also be better to have your page options in a little bit bigger font. It took me a second and a few confused glances to find them.…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 sounds like a plan.

Ahhh… you can do it. 😉

@Cloudy just want to let you know I haven’t abandoned you; I’m going through the story bit by bit and formulating thoughts and such. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99 meh. Logic. Who cares about logic? 😛

Forget the logic for a sec. What is the most natural emotional course for the characters? Go wild. Not even kidding.
And one question that might give you some answers— what is the Warden going to do with Blake? What are they saying/doing, locked up in that office together?

*pulls out sword pen and sticks it behind her ear* How can I help?

@That_Writer_Girl_99

Oooooh, I like it!

There is one thing that could use tweaking though. Both Kara and Matthias seem a little scattered and unfocused as to their emotional state. Now they’re supposed to be; I know. They’re both confused. But the reader shouldn’t be. It’s not that both of them shouldn’t be struggling with several different emotions at once, but that…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 don’t think so. Heading over there now.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *appears in a poof of elvish stardust**adjusts Jedi robes* You wanted to talk about chapter seven?

1. Blackened Rose
2. Bloodstained Crown
3. Broken Seal

Definitely.

@Hope

@Hope I like @Dragon-Snapper‘s suggestions, but I also think your three aren’t as terrible as they could be.
Except for the last.
Which is rubbish.
Excuse me.
*coughs* 😛

But you had a good thing going there with the different wars. If you could think of a third war to make that last one fit, I don’t think that would be so terribly wretched.…[Read more]

@Dragon-Snapper same to you! *breathes fire(works)*

@Dragon-Snapper yes. That too. XD

You know you’re a writer when you set passwords to the most un-spellable un-pronounceable location names in the obscurest places of your fantasy world, which even if by a miracle someone was to find and pick the right one they’d never remember how to spell it. XD

@Jess-penrose oooh, Happiness Patrol… I like that. 😀

@Jane-maree thanks. XD

@Dragon-Snapper ahhhhhhh!! I’m sorry! I realized I’d forgotten you about five minutes after it was too late to edit. :/ Forgive me, fellow dragon. I have erred.

@Daeus *chokes*