Mark Kamibaya

@Mariposa I think I’m dying. XD XD XD

@mariposa These are great. 😀

I believe Gracie and Sierra are @graciegirl and @sierra-r

@Mariposa good heavens, I think I’m dying. XD XD XD

I didn’t mind that section, but I definitely know some people who would be bothered. As long as you have a connection, cause yeah, like Kate said, it kinda did feel drop you random in the middle of gore and evil for no reason, out of context like that.

About the swear words things. Obviously, top swear words are out. Then you get into the picky…[Read more]

@aratrea Clearly I need to get on the forum more, but putting someone’s username underneath their actual name to save all that extra clicking was a stroke of genius.

@amy-l-klob *sweeps hat off and bows with a flourish* Always an honor to be of service to writers of the Kingdom 😉

@Xonos-darkgrate what @Daeus and the rest already said, basically, on the general subject.

I did, however, find your excerpt slightly disturbing, which is odd, because I’m not usually disturbed by that kind of stuff. It may have been because it lacked subtlety and I kind of just felt like I had my face shoved in a pool of blood for no reason and…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate I know some people who would find that too graphic, but I don’t. I think there’s a good light/dark contrast and it doesn’t make me feel empathetic toward the villain so I’d say this is good so long as it’s for a good purpose. 🙂

Oh, and I didn’t read your excerpt either. If I did, I’d want to know what basic content was in it first and I might not be able to get it in anyways.

@xonos-darkgrate

I’ll just stop in real quick to drop a few bits of meat, but if you want to hear a lot about this subject, we have several articles on it.

The thing I think is crucial to understand with content is that you want sympathy but you do not want empathy.

Sympathy is when you feel for or understand another person’s e…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

@leumeister Yes

@Daeus

So, that’s Camille, Raphael, and Lachlan? Right-oh.

Interestingly enough, this is already reflecting the results of the three polls I posted on the YWWC. 😛

@leumeister I would personally vote 1, 3, 2.

@amy-l-klob I’d recommend starting by introducing your protagonist, but I would be careful about having a slow lead-in to the actual story. You want to grab the audience’s attention in the first page. That doesn’t mean you need to immediately leap into the main plot of your novel, but you should be including some conflict and/or intrigue that…[Read more]

@dekreel Is that your quote? Because it’s from the same movie. 😛 XD

@catwing “We survived but we’re dead!!” XD

Lots of works have more than one villain. For the BBC series of Robin Hood, they had the Sheriff of Notingham, and Guy of Gisborne. Guy mostly worked for the Sheriff, but he also had his own personal axe to grind with Robin Hood, which didn’t just make him the main villain’s lackey.

Lord of the Rings has both Sauron and Sauraman Again, Sauraman…[Read more]

@inkling-for-christ Thanks! This will make it much easier to give you specific and understandable feedback. 🙂