Mark Kamibaya

@kate-flournoy @dragon-snapper Okey dokey. I just realized I don’t have my next chapter planted out, so I’m gonna do that, and I’ll stop whenever it’s done.

@kate-flournoy @daeus I’ll be writing/planning.

@Daeus ohhhh… Yes. That one. I actually didn’t care for that one as a sentence, but the breeze that would change the world was a nice touch.

@kate-flournoy No, the one about the shade waiting in ambush and the breeze that would change the world.

@his-instrument No, that’s great actually. I really appreciate the fresh perspective. I’ll work on this a little bit more and then come back.

@Daeus okay, sure. No problem. Tag me if/when you start.

@kate-flournoy I’ll try to stop in soon, in which case I’ll probably go later. I may also have to leave abruptly at any time, so I don’t know how this is gonna go.

@Daeus @Dragon-Snapper I’m writing… join in. How far do you guys wanna go? I’m going till 9:45, but don’t feel obligated.

About starting off with the theme thing, I mean.

Yeah. That.

Obviously I can’t take credit for you being an all around awesome person.

@Emma-Flournoy *beams proudly* I have taught you well, my young apprentice.

XD

@HowlingWolf It sounds like you’ve done a good job on characterization already. 😀 Manuel and Lilly have stolen my heart.

The best kind are undoubtedly those that don’t raise false expectations. So specific, I know. 😛 But I’d much rather have an unexciting one than one that makes me really excited and then doesn’t satisfy.
For good ones though, the kind that start off either with a great dialogue line or action are catching, if truly funny or intelligent or…[Read more]

@Daeus what, the one that goes ‘The songs of the dead are the lamentations of the living’ one? I’m not sure I remembered that right, but it was the best I could do on short notice… 😛

@Dragon-Snapper what they said— questions. Not necessarily something gaudy or high-tension— just questions.

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper, I’m no expert when it comes to first sentences, but I know a good one when I see it. It’s a good thing the theme of the month for January is exactly this topic. I have a good feeling my fellow writing team members will have some articles just for this.

My favorite first sentence so far has to be from The Rise and Fall of Mount…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper Aha, but not anymore.