Mark Kamibaya

@hope Ah; I like that. So they’re not only foils with the main theme, but appear to be opposites with what might be a major or minor theme of power. He sounds the most like a foil to me. He isn’t an ultimate foil with regards to the primary theme, but if he’s an ultimate foil with regards to another theme, he can still function as the best…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy Ah; nice. I like that. Moving characters from extremes to a middle ground is a really good way of implementing Method #2.

Ah; nice. I like that. Moving characters from extremes to a middle ground is a really good way of implementing Method #2.

@jane-maree My recommendation would be to figure out what chain of events will lead the protagonist from the inciting event to the first plot point, and then use those to structure that area. Also possibly use that period to develop your characters more before throwing them out into the fray. K.M. Weiland wrote a post about this several years back…[Read more]

@hope Yep. That’s awesome. I like it a lot.

@Aratrea

My main villain is a former friend of Ethaniel’s. They were messengers together and developed a strong bond because Ethaniel has no name and Keros (who ends up becoming the villain) was of mixed blood (Ethaniel actually helped and cared for Keros when Keros first joined the force. He’s the main reason Keros stayed). Keros’s EiL is that a…[Read more]

I know, @northerner , I did break fairy tale protocol. (When I did, it felt like I was banging my head against a brick wall.) There was a lot of age difference, though. Sorry. 😉

Thanks for your opinion, I agree with you. I think her experiences should make her want to do something to help other princesses who may suffer from similar…[Read more]

Those are some good ideas, @kate-flournoy . I was thinking that I needed to either make the story more about the princess, or the peddler, and I started to go with the princess, which is why I cut out some at the end that talked about his life after the whole affair. However, what you wrote made me think about it some more, and I think the…[Read more]

I’m going to go with Arianwen again. Her arc mirrors Harold’s, making it a type one. They both follow disillusionment arcs.
Arianwen’s, however, more represents the flip side of Harold’s, because while Harold was particularly disillusioned with the ‘good guys’ and almost considered joining the bad guys, Arianwen, because she was on the wrong side…[Read more]

@Ingridrd Ah, well, we have nothing, if it ain’t stolen. (To completely butcher a Reepicheep quote. 😛 )

@Overcomer I love this. I love the whimsical feel to the whole thing. It’s sooo fairytale-ish. 🙂

As far as changes, I second what Kate said, but otherwise, nice job. 😀

@Overcomer *grins* I like this. Muchly. The only thing I might say do differently than how you have it is make this the peddler’s story, not the princess’s. By which I mean, take out the intro about the princess who had trouble dancing (hilarious though it is) and just start with the peddler on the road meeting the dancing master. That will give…[Read more]

Yay! Thanks, @daeus ! 😀

@overcomer Your message got marked as spam for some reason. I got it up now.

Hey @daeus ,

It was a short story that disappeared when I tried to edit it … technical diffulties! *sigh* I’m trying to put it up again, but it doesn’t want to go up because it says it already exists …

What’s this @overcomer?