Mark Kamibaya

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yeah. What he said. XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I’ll just repeat what Kate said that the character voice is really well done. I’m especially surprised you’ve been able to get this good without anyone critiquing you. Honestly, that’s downright crazy.

It does seem that the plot needs some development though, as well as the question of what to do with the elementals.

I…[Read more]

Here are some things. I guess some of them were there with the previous excerpts too, I just didn’t remember them all (or didn’t have time to be thorough enough, which is also possible. :P).

Halle… Moonglade. Yes. That was the perfect name. Sure, she’d attempted to write several books, leaving them unfinished… but this was different. Yes, she’d…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 ooooohhhh… you know what? It looks like you’ve got really good potential here for a disillusionment story. I really, really love the idea of the world outside being even worse than the prison.
What do you know about theme/message and building your story around it?
Because if you do have the world outside be worse than the…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 no, I know. It isn’t. 😛 Have you come up with any ideas so far? Need help brainstorming? Seriously, just dump them all right here and I’ll help you pick through them if I can. That’s what we do here. We’re all writers after all… 😉 Even if you think the ideas are dumb, please— share them. I have dumb ideas all the time.…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99

Wow.
Okay, first of all, may I just say congratulations on the very strong character voice. Most people go for the snazzy voices of characters like Tam to carry their story if it’s first person, but I love the subtle yet very distinct tone of Kara’s. It’s beautiful.

In fact, your prose itself is actually very strong, and I…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I totally get that. You’ll be fine. I promise. 😉 Tag me when you do post and I’ll get back to you with opinions as soon as I’ve done a thorough read through. 🙂

@That_Writer_Girl_99 ha. XD Not at all…

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *salutes* reporting for duty! And really, we’re not monsters. 😀 Just start a new topic over in General Writing Discussions or something and we’ll have a nice little critiquing party with cake and brownies and punch for everyone. 😀 (Virtual, of course. *wink*)

@feedingmygoldfish Piebald squirrels?! *goes to look these things up* What?! Awwwww!!!!! That’s the best thing ever! I’m still partial to my favorite pals the black squirrel. No matter how cute those piebald’s are.

Ah, yes! A book with a squirrel as the main character (and Marvin McNutt! Hahaha! I love that so much!)! I’m so happy right now :p…[Read more]

Hi, @moriahs. Glad to find another historical fiction lover. I can’t say I love the research, but if I can handle that, it’s one of my favorite genres.

@moriahs Oh, nice. I read Bond’s Crown and Covenant Trilogy, Betrayal, and a couple others when I was still in high school and remember enjoying each of them. Great historical fiction there.

@Daeus yessir. I stopped doing this wonderful thing once I approached (aka got within ten chapters of :’D) the climax and started really having to rethink you-know-who. My typical writing night was too messy to have too much competition or I would have imploded from the double pressure. 😛 Once I get past the chapter I’m on (wherein about eight…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 Ah, yes, the shows that were around when I was little were the good ones. 😛
@daeus I’m signing out now. I wrote about 850 words, not much of it being dialogue, but I think it’s good action, so I’m happy with it.

@that_writer_girl_99 Strangely, yes. I think there was one episode where Emily Elizabeth was throwing a party and her ‘friend’ wanted her to add more pizzazz, and she’d wiggle her fingers fancily whenever she’d say it, and as a little kid, that word stuck out as interesting. 😛

@that_writer_girl_99 I think of Clifford.

By the way, @kate-flournoy, do you still ever write at night?

@daeus Well, that’s always important. Pizzazz. I’ll have to use that word.

@daeus Well, that’s always important. Pizzazz.